Sunday Photo Fiction: A Place to Fall #amwriting #fiction #SPFo


Thanks to Susan Spaulding for hosting SPF.


Credit: Susan Spaulding


The catacomb walls were thick and confining. Iris let out a lungful of pent up breath as sunlight filtered through a doorway. The tunnels with so many bones of the same type stacked on other bones, frightened her.

She wondered why in such an ancient country, human remains were not given the respect of a grave for more than a year or two — or at least cremation.

Iris wheezed as Don, rubbed her back. “You having an attack?”

“No.”

He rolled his eyes. “You say that every time we visit tight spaces. You’re claustrophobic.”

“I’m fine. Don’t worry.” Iris was close to the exit, but the air she breathed was too stale; there wasn’t enough fresh air in the Catacombs. Her body collapsed and she couldn’t control the darkness that overcame her.

Then, Don was lifting her. Her eyes opened as he carried her into blinding daylight. A tiny ‘V’ furrowed between his gray ones.

He stroked her hair. “I got you.”

“Always?” Her voice was faint.

“Always. I know you better than you think.”

She inhaled cool air and let Don cradle her weight.


©Mandibelle16. (2018) All Rights Reserved.

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10 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: A Place to Fall #amwriting #fiction #SPFo

  1. Singledust May 22, 2018 / 3:48 am

    good build up of her anxiety. that he knew her so well was comforting. love the gentle protectiveness.

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    • mandibelle16 May 22, 2018 / 11:53 am

      Yes exactly. I’m glad you got that from the piece, it was what I was trying to show. Thanks for reading SD. I hope u have a wonderful rest of the week 🙂

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      • Singledust May 22, 2018 / 4:05 pm

        and to you too Mandi! finally getting round to reading your stories and recalling how much i enjoy them.

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      • mandibelle16 May 23, 2018 / 1:09 am

        I’m glad you do. I did poetry all April and half of May to catch up, it’s nice to get back into fiction routine again. Thanks SD. I appreciate it so much 🙂

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      • Singledust May 23, 2018 / 4:21 pm

        I miss writing fiction so much but have yet to find the right groove, it will come I am sure. I met an amazing local artist when I was in Penang, she does the most amazing illustrations, I have had some stories dancing around her work! I am always inspired by your dedication to your craft, I believe you read a lot too and that really enhances your work.

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      • mandibelle16 May 23, 2018 / 8:21 pm

        Thanks SingleDust. I do read a lot lol. I also am almost done a fiction course from a FB group capped writers world. The guy who,teaches it is wonderful. It opened my eyes to many things. Cheers and thanks again.

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    • mandibelle16 May 23, 2018 / 1:10 am

      Yes, Ian you are very right. He’s a good guy, especially when she won’t admit to her phobia lol. Thanks for reading.

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