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Writing Prompt: Poem – Bop – “Breaks Your Bones With Mirth” #poetry #amwriting


Thanks to Pat of MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie for hosting last Sunday’s writing prompt. 

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Credit: MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie (Pat)

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There’s something about love decidedly,

Painful, heart twisting, leaving jagged lines.

While once you functioned on your straight path, 

You struggle to be separated, unclasped, 

From your lover caught such sweet endorphins,

Feel good moments together, love morphed. 

Love breaks your bones with laughter and rich mirth. 

There are times you beg to be left alone, 

Marking out your space, a millisecond —

Of time to yourself wished, without cleaning, 

Tidying up the mess, dealing with mean, 

Gestures of agonized perfection you’ll, 

Never live up to, with nagging so cruel.

If only it was easier to both be, 

More easy going, he and you pleased. 

Love breaks your bones with laughter and rich mirth. 

Back under the covers hide you both, 

Yourselves, to frantic lovers never clothed. 

When you can forget your petty squabbles, 

When skin and touch are both arrows, 

To passion and renewal, to time spent, 

Lounging and loving close, you both relent. 

Love breaks your bones with laughter and rich mirth. 

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©Mandibelle16. (2017) All Rights Reserved. 


7 thoughts on “Writing Prompt: Poem – Bop – “Breaks Your Bones With Mirth” #poetry #amwriting”

  1. There’s something about love decidedly,

    What a great opening line Mandi 🙂 There is something so interesting about the feel, tone and sound of this – the weight of it on the tongue, as it rests in the mind and slips into the heart …..

    This is such an interesting piece – the repetition works so well throughout – and it’s almost like a sorrowful dirge – a lament of sorts – but without any shockingly hard edges – a quiet observation and acceptance.

    It has a wonderful flow to it 🙂

    Thanks for playing the Sunday writing prompt 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂 what I was trying to get across was the desperate feeling of being in love but also the reality of life where two people have to get along despite each other’s personal preferences. The end is supposed to be like a temporary halt to this, that there is more to their relationship than everyday squabbles, there is life and affection, closeness.
      Thanks for reading 🙂

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      1. I think it’s a wonderful piece – having just re-read it again – and it still intrigues and holds me – so that’s what’s important 🙂

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