Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Poem – Rictameter – “The Angel” #amwriting #flashfiction #poetry  

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Credit: Louise – The Storyteller’s Abode


Here’s she,

His sweet angel,

Wearing her frothy gown,

She’s beautiful, elegant,

A wife any man could love or desire.

She’s the epitome, the standard,

What women should be like,

Humming music,

Here’s she.


Her hair,

Perfectly coiffed,

Mother of six children,

Few lines on her face, she holds up.

Although, life’s pressure can be confining,

Her lips smile a gesture rehearsed.

What’s underneath in her —

Boarding school mind,

Her hair?



She’d wants all to —

Perceive she’s the perfect wife.

Society expects her to —

Set perfect example because —

She’s upperclass, the lead in the charade.

Acting as the moral —

Center, she must




Of the great dame,

Her family, pride, joy,

Madame’s smile is slipping because,

Performing all the time is exhausting.

She wonders if she might sit with —

Port to sip, not thinking,

Herself; not a —



©Mandibelle16. (2017) All Rights Reserved


13 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Poem – Rictameter – “The Angel” #amwriting #flashfiction #poetry  ”

  1. I love your focus on the woman and how you really fleshed her out as a person and made her three-dimensional, revealing her desires to be a perfect wife and so on. It made me take a second look at the woman in the painting. Well written, Mandi!

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  2. its hard to be perfect all the time never letting the mask and perfection crack. she needs to know she is a warm woman under all that expectation she has layered upon herself. I love the nuances you have created in your few lines, lives of a myriad of women portrayed here. And the sometimes impossible burden we heave upon ourselves. Lovely as always Mandibelle.

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    1. She’s a Victorian woman of the upperclass, she has things expected of her and I think if she let her mask slip, it would be awful for her. It’s very sad. I’m glad you liked the portrait. Thanks for commenting 🙂

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