Sunday Photo Fiction: The Exception #amwriting #flashfiction 


Thanks to Alistair Forbes for hosting SPF.

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Credit: A Mixed Bag

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In their years of friendship, Alise and Janelle never fought except over Chaz Monroe. He dated Alise in high school causing a huge argument between the girls. 

“I liked him first you know that Alise,” Janelle had said. “Why are you still seeing him?” 

“We’ve been going out three-years Janelle. We’re planning a life together.” They’d been drinking vodka and Janelle threw hers on Alise. 

Then Chaz left for university and broke up with Alise. He dated another girl and Alise and Janelle reconciled over their disgust of Chaz’s tart

Ten- years later, Chaz came back to town. He was still handsome and Alise and Janelle had both secretly been in contact with him.

 Chaz visited Janelle first but when he came to Alise’s he told her, “I missed you so much, Alise. I’m sorry I ever broke up with you. Would you consider giving us a second chance?” 

Alise agreed, she loved Chaz. But when Janelle found out about Alice and Chaz she invited her friend over under false pretences of congratulating her. 

Janelle mixed neat vodka’s for them both and threw candied cherries in their drinks. Alise took a few sips, choking on the weird tasting cherry. She was shocked to see Janelle slumped over dead as she too succumbed; Janelle had poisoned them both. 

They had always been bestfriends except when it came to Chaz Monroe. 

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©Mandibell16. (2017) All Rights Reserved. 

23 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: The Exception #amwriting #flashfiction 

  1. Joy Pixley February 27, 2017 / 9:22 pm

    Always so sad when friends let a man/woman come between them. Although at least it doesn’t usually come to such a drastic and tragic conclusion as this!

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    • mandibelle16 February 27, 2017 / 9:25 pm

      No thankfully it doesn’t. But the tragic ending is good for a story 🙂 Janelle decided if she can’t him than neither one of them could. They should’ve kept the ‘Ho’s before bros’ rule as they say lol.

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      • Joy Pixley February 27, 2017 / 10:04 pm

        I agree — so many things that make for good stories, I’m happy they don’t happen in my real life!

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  2. Singledust February 27, 2017 / 11:37 pm

    like the way you showed that they both got sucked into his charm and never respected their friendship, I suppose this happens in reality too but with not such devastating circumstances, still….there have been news reports similar to this. I like that fiction can sometimes show how bad decisions and choices affect lives. Like this, yours is a good strong story Mandibelle showing us love is not so generous or forgiving!

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    • mandibelle16 February 28, 2017 / 10:03 am

      Thank you SingleDust. I had two best friends get into a huge fight over a guy in my fourth year of university (years ago now!) and it was awful being caught in the middle between them. They weren’t best friends but I imagined if they were it would have been so much worse. Yes, of course for a story you take it to the extreme but I’m pretty sure somewhere jealousy has ended some love triangles and the people involved!

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      • Singledust February 28, 2017 / 1:44 pm

        I know how it must have been, while never really in the middle of such fights I have seen good friendships go shaky and never recover when romance gets in the picture. I feel sad when friendships end like that and there doesn’t seem to be a way to mend it, almost like the death scene you wrote.

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  3. The Voice February 28, 2017 / 7:06 am

    Nicely written story, Amanda. I like the way you brought it back around and gave it the twist.

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  4. Iain Kelly February 28, 2017 / 11:42 am

    Wow, like Romeo and Juliet with a twist. A shame they let Chaz come between their friendship. Dramatic story, well done.

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  5. maria February 28, 2017 / 4:43 pm

    Oh dear. The things you do for love. It’s a story packed with betrayal, obsession, and action Mandi! Well done. ✌🏿

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    • mandibelle16 March 5, 2017 / 11:25 am

      Thanks know they are much better aren’t they? I guess it was too much for the one friend to handle. Thanks for reading 🙂

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  6. Sunday Fiction March 5, 2017 / 5:18 am

    Juliet and Juliet left Romeo alone. “Neither of us will have him” mentality. I like it.

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