Sunday Photo Fiction: To Be Free #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

Thanks to Alistair Forbes for hosting SPF.


Credit: C.E. Ayer


Lush trees surround me, green and verdant, as I walk out to the lake for a swim. I’ve been doing this for years now, swimming up to the buoys and back, twenty laps every morning. 

When I’m on my last lap I notice the usual small boat not far from the buoy and behind it a rowboat. The larger boat appears deserted and I feel my self begin to sweat despite the warm water. 

I decide to swim closer to the large boat but then the shock of a sudden explosion on the sinking ship has me diving underwater, swimming quickly to avoid the debree. Coming up onto the water’s surface only a tip of the vessel shows as its final resting place becomes the bottom of the lake. 

The following morning I come to swim and there are police and rescue volunteers sweeping the water. This ship was a home for a grizzled man and his wife Stephanie. Somehow she survived the ship’s explosion untouched while her husband died. 

Stephanie meets me later at home. I’ve been looking after her for years, protecting her from an abusive husband. We smile and she kisses my lips, “Jack, I can’t believe it worked; I’m free.” 


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

14 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: To Be Free #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

  1. Singledust February 1, 2017 / 4:40 pm

    oh i love this – just loved the story! My kind of happy ending – errr or am I saying too much here. You had me guessing who could do 20 laps in a river every morning and then the story just twisted and curved – and then boom! Did I say I liked it? I liked it!

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    • mandibelle16 February 1, 2017 / 7:30 pm

      I’m really pleased you liked it SingleDust. I don’t know about the 20 laps, for me it was a lake so I guess I didn’t feel it was out so far. But happy it worked for you. Thanks for your lovely comment 🙂

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  2. Iain Kelly February 2, 2017 / 6:34 am

    Great twist at the end. I wonder if they will get away with it, or maybe it will eat away at their consciences.

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    • mandibelle16 February 2, 2017 / 9:33 am

      Thanks for reading Ian. I’m not sure, her husband was a pretty terrible guy, but was that enough to say he deserved to die? It’s a good question.

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  3. patriciaruthsusan February 5, 2017 / 2:35 am

    Great twist at the end Mandi. I guess he won’t be bothering them anymore. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • mandibelle16 February 5, 2017 / 1:39 pm

      Thank you Suzanne. No he won’t, not the best solution, but maybe as in your story, there wasn’t a better one?


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