Friday Fictioneer: Poem – Ottava Rima –  ” Beach Drive” #amwriting #poetry #flashfiction #1920’s

Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff – Fields for hosting FF. 


Credit: A Mixed Bag – Alistair Forbes


Can you put my pieces back together?

Make me whole again? I long for —

Air rushing against chrome, driver moving —

As fast as full throttle can go more

Fill me with people; fix my engine too. 

Put some diesel in the tank go for —

A day trip with your hands on the wheel,

Switching gears, we drive until I’m healed.


Let’s go for a drive, to the seaside,

Find some entertainment on sandy beaches. 

Let the girls wear their Jantzen suits glide,

Into lake shallows, splash each other, each

Laughing, cloche hats tight; stockings gone beachside,

Honk my horn –it’s time to go; don’t screech —

My tires, they’re full of air, we’re driving fast,

Back in the days, driving was a pastime


*Jantzen – swim suits more like swim dresses from the 1920’s made out of a stretchy thick jersey, not wool as many previous swim suits were made from.  Jantzen jersey swim dresses were stretcher than regular jersey material. 

*Cloche hats – swim caps with a strap under the chin to hold them on a woman’s head and worn in the 1920’s. 

See Sun, Fun, and 1920’s from the blog Vintage Dancer. 


© Mandibelle16. (2017) All Rights Reserved. 

18 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneer: Poem – Ottava Rima –  ” Beach Drive” #amwriting #poetry #flashfiction #1920’s

  1. patrickprinsloo January 28, 2017 / 3:24 am

    Beautifully written and a great piece of nostalgia. I read it emphasising the italicised words and it sounds lovely.

    Liked by 1 person

    • mandibelle16 January 28, 2017 / 6:56 pm

      I’m glad you liked them, others didn’t like them italicized so much. I guess it’s easier to let people choose what to emphasis for the most part. Thanks for commenting.


  2. neilmacdon January 28, 2017 / 3:34 am

    I liked the first two lines too. The problem with responding to too many prompts at once is that the threads get snarled

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    • mandibelle16 January 28, 2017 / 6:55 pm

      Just one thread, but I’m going to remove the italicized words, or most of thanks. Appreciate the comment.


  3. rochellewisoff January 28, 2017 / 4:06 am

    Dear Amanda,

    Interesting verse and sweet memories. I don’t understand why certain words are italicized, though. I found them disconcerting. Unless, as Neil said, this is in response to more than one prompt.



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    • mandibelle16 January 28, 2017 / 6:54 pm

      Haha. I’m glad to get feedback on this. I’m Just trying to emphasize certain words in my poetry. But my general sense is from playing around with these italicized words in both fiction/poetry they’re to be used sparsely. I will remember to in the future use them much less and have a look at the poem to remove most of them. Thanks again 🙂


  4. jacquelineobyikocha January 28, 2017 / 4:40 am

    I like the cars thoughts.
    Let me invite you to my blog party taking place right now. Enjoy your weekend.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Dale January 29, 2017 / 1:26 pm

    Yes, I did enjoy this quite a lot!

    Liked by 1 person

  6. patriciaruthsusan February 1, 2017 / 4:56 am

    A great story written in poetic form, Mandi. Those swim hats hung around even after the twenties. I wore them in the fifties. I had one with a big rubber orchid on the side. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

    Liked by 1 person

    • mandibelle16 February 1, 2017 / 11:35 am

      Thanks Suzanne. It sounds like your swimcap was a pretty one 🙂


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