Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Killing A Snake #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

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Credit: Grant Sud


Leonard was absorbed by the red hues of the wide Arizona desert. It was hot outside in the late spring, the cascading layers of rock enthralling and the green shrubs and cacti complementing the red cliffs. Here Leonard could be alone with his thoughts, far from the problems of his life. 

No one was chasing him in the desert. No one was telling him he wasn’t allowed to set fire to buildings. No one was insisting Leonard couldn’t punch a guy in the face and start fighting because Leonard didn’t like how the guy was looking at him, or that the guy had a hot girlfriend which Leonard did not. In the desert, no one knew how much money he’d stashed away in offshore accounts from the company where he’d been an accountant with a falsified identity, these past two-years.

Out here in the desert, there was serenity and quiet. Leonard would in an hour, catch a private plane and reclaim his offshore funds. But he wasn’t counting on the rattle snake who bit his leg when he stood up and stepped on the snake accidentally.

The snake’s poisonus venom made Leonard numb in minutes. Quickly he was fading into obscurity and death; the bright red Arizona desert claiming him for all his wrongs. How curious a snake would kill a snake


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22 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Killing A Snake #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

  1. Coyote from Orion January 4, 2017 / 6:50 pm

    I went through the Arizona desert in 1993. Long defining experience

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    • mandibelle16 January 4, 2017 / 9:15 pm

      Thank you JR. Yeah, definitely gives the idea of ‘Karma’ or do unto others. It doesn’t always work that way, but for the purposes of this story — he gets his ‘poetic justic’ or deserved reward.

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      • joyroses13 January 4, 2017 / 9:18 pm

        LOL! Karma is what came to me, since you have talked about that before with the Dewey stories 🙂

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      • mandibelle16 January 4, 2017 / 9:40 pm

        Ah yes, you’re right lol. I think both Dewey and the man servant get their own karma lol.

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  2. Ameena k.g January 4, 2017 / 10:38 pm

    Oh I love that last line! What you send out to the world is what you will receive. Leonard definitely received his share, love this!

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    • mandibelle16 January 4, 2017 / 11:49 pm

      Yes exactly. It doesn’t always work that way, but in this story it does. I was thinking the same thing, Karma or poetic Justice, however, you wish to say it. Thank you for commenting Ameena 😊💕

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  3. Iain Kelly January 5, 2017 / 1:06 am

    Great story Mandi, always good when a nasty character gets what they deserve!

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  4. Shivangi January 5, 2017 / 11:11 am

    Lovely… the last line was strong! what an unexpected ending!

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  5. Priceless Joy January 5, 2017 / 2:05 pm

    Great story Mandi! A snake killed a snake! LOL! I want to remind you that the word limit is 175 words. I have noticed some people have been going over and I need to rein everyone back in to sticking with the word limit.

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    • mandibelle16 January 7, 2017 / 12:12 pm

      Thanks Yarnspinner. I suppose in many someways. The karma coming back to bite you sort of thing 🙂

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  6. sailajaP14 January 8, 2017 / 8:16 am

    Ooh. A shiver runs down my spine as I read this piece. Live how it ends. snake vs snake. Beautiful!

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    • mandibelle16 January 8, 2017 / 11:00 am

      Thank you very much. In a way yes, more do so he wasn’t expecting for a snake to bite him, he thought he’d get away with it, but nature and well, the snake he stepped on, had other ideas. Karma I think 🙂

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