Friday Fictioneer: When We Are Eighty #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

Thanks to Rachel Wisoff-Fields for hosting FF.


Credit: Roger Bultot


Patriots was a genuine fifty-style’s diner. Darla a new waitress, was thrilled to have her first job part-time there. Off to the side of the diner was a jukebox near a small dance floor. 

On Friday and Saturday nights, elderly couples could be found dancing here to their favourite fifties tunes. But Christmas Eve was the ‘big ticket’ event. Tables were cleared for a larger dance floor and a diner-style feast was served.

Darla watched once WWII-era toddlers, dancing in fifties garb with pep. She was only fifteen, but as she waitressed throughout high school, Christmas Eve would become by her favourite night at Patriots. She hoped one day she would meet a guy she could still dance with when they were eighty. 


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

16 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneer: When We Are Eighty #amwriting #flashfiction #fiction

  1. Iain Kelly December 23, 2016 / 3:08 am

    Lovely touching tale for the holiday season. Merry Christmas Mandi! 🙂

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  2. Jade M. Wong December 23, 2016 / 9:21 am

    Awww! I love this take on the prompt. Perfect and in time for the holiday season ❤

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  3. Copper Cranes December 24, 2016 / 10:54 am

    Amanda, a lovely and endearing story, especially for the holidays. Wouldn’t it be splendid if we can all still dance when we’re eighty. I hope you’re having a great day, and please have a wonderful Christmas Eve. ~ Mia 🙂 ❤

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  4. k rawson December 25, 2016 / 4:13 am

    Sweet story. I love what you did with the line “Darla watched once WWII-era toddlers, dancing in fifties garb with pep”. It not only gives backstory, it pulls the reader through a lifetime. Nicely done!

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    • mandibelle16 December 25, 2016 / 11:37 am

      Thanks so much. That was my intention, so I’m happy it worked. I wanted to give the idea they had many stories to tell from an interesting lifetime. Merry Christmas!

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  5. patriciaruthsusan December 29, 2016 / 1:54 am

    Ah yes, I remember it well. I don’t dance anymore but still enjoy the 50’s rock-n-roll music. It sometimes seems like just yesterday. Good writing, Mandi. 🙂 — Suzanne

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