November Notes: Poem – Day 23 – Tankas – ” Never Us”

Today’s song prompt is “You Are a Memory” by Message to Bear.


“You Are a Memory” – Message to Bear


Our pictures scattered,

Cross the ground, snowflakes —

Gathering, wetting,

Our times together lost in,

Snow, packing higher, hiding.


Tired of calling, this

Is the last time I’m telling —

You, put my name on,

Your list of significance,

So daft –never mind, too late.


Today I quit you,

Today I saw through you and —

Snow piled up on–

Pictures meaning nothing much,

Goodbye, you’re just glass; I’m steel.


Walking beneath trees,

Nature inviting me back in,

Your frosty winter —

Gone when spring comes with daisies,

Buttercups, roses, grass.


Met you one last time,

Found our pictures decaying,

You looked beneath, saw —

The blue and it was stunning,

But it was never us, thank God.


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.


5 thoughts on “November Notes: Poem – Day 23 – Tankas – ” Never Us””

  1. Amanda, these tankas are wonderful, I love what you’ve done with the challenge. I think you’ve captured the painful end of a relationship perfectly. Your last tanka sums things up nicely, when we finally realize (seeing clearly) and we’re moving away in the right direction. “But it was never us, thank God.” The last line is perfect!

    I hope you’re enjoying your weekend, take care. ~ Mia 🙂

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  2. Good evening Amanda 🙂

    I found your blog through Danny’s Meet & Greet and I was pleased to discover someone else doing the NovemberNotes challenge! Beautiful post, charged with emotion… Congratulations!

    Liked by 1 person

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