Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: The Banshee #amwriting #writing #flashfiction 


Thank you to Priceless Joy for hosting FFftAW: 

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Credit: Barb CT

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Maizie stared at the neighbouring property to her parents cabin. For as long as she could remember, the property had been deserted. 

Growing up, Maizie and her two brothers would create possible stories about what happened to the people who lived in the ruins of the old cabin. 

“It was a shark, one as big as Jaws,” her younger brother Rupert said. 

“It had to be bigger than a shark and fiercer,” said her eldest brother Richard.

The possible stories continue until they were all three, young teenagers. 

“I dare you to go out to the haunted cabin,” Richard told Maizie. 

“Come on,”Rupert teased her.

Maizie thought she would show, both her brothers, she wasn’t afraid. “Fine I’ll go, but you two have to come with me. Bring the flashlights.” 

All three siblings crept out to the abandoned property at night. When they reached the cabin, a moaning wail made them all jump. 

“What was that?” Rupert asked.

Maizie could feel her palms sweat in fear as the wailing continued. 

At that moment, the banshee chose to sneak up behind them — a possibility which hadn’t occurred to Maizie and her brothers. 

The banshee appeared to float, and a large black cloak covered her knotted grey hair. Her eyes were black coals piercing their souls and her skin felt like crepe paper as the banshee touched all their faces. 

Richard said fearfully, “Banshees only come when a family member is about to die, what’s she doing here?”

The Banshee’s wails increased at Richard’s suggestion and she sucked the life out of all three siblings. Their young life forces were exactly what she required.  

Her haggish appearance lifted and a beautiful woman walked out of the ruins of the abandoned cabin, smiling at her now youthful appearance. 

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

29 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: The Banshee #amwriting #writing #flashfiction 

  1. Iain Kelly November 17, 2016 / 10:10 pm

    Great horror tale, I wonder who she will trap next now she has her looks and youth back again! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 November 17, 2016 / 11:23 pm

      Thank you Ian, I wonder as well. Does she need to keep feeding on the young to maintain her appearance, or is she free to do as she pleases for many years.

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  2. momtheobscure November 17, 2016 / 11:30 pm

    If ever I encounter a banshee I’ll know to run. All 3 – she must be some beauty now!

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    • mandibelle16 November 18, 2016 / 3:59 am

      I think so. It should give her beauty and extend her life a while. Then I think she’d have to do it again. Thanks for your comments.

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  3. michnavs November 18, 2016 / 1:43 am

    Oohhh hats off mandy..that was a beautiful horror tale ..been wanting to write something like that..

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    • mandibelle16 November 18, 2016 / 4:59 pm

      Thank you Jacqueline I’m pleased this story affected you and others enough to be frightening. I didn’t much research banshees. I only know they are an Irish creature who comes and wails when someone in the family is about to die. Beyond that, I just played with the monster to make her as evil as she is. I’m sure there are many others who have as well. Thanks again my friend 🙂

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  4. Priceless Joy November 18, 2016 / 2:17 pm

    Wow! Great story Mandi with a horrific ending! The Banshee took the life from those three teenagers so she could be young again. Wonderful scary story!

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    • mandibelle16 November 18, 2016 / 4:53 pm

      Thank you so much PJ. I don’t know if typical banshees do this, but this one does I guess. Like any scary creature you can play with how evil they are. Have a great Thanksgiving weekend!

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      • Priceless Joy November 18, 2016 / 5:39 pm

        You’re right Mandi! It is a great story! You have a great weekend too!

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      • mandibelle16 November 18, 2016 / 10:37 pm

        Thank you. I forgot Thanksgiving for you guys is next week. There are many pre-black Friday sales already up here. So it’s a bit confusing. Regardless, enjoy your Friday and weekend 🙂

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      • Priceless Joy November 18, 2016 / 10:47 pm

        No problem Mandi! I knew what you meant. You have a wonderful weekend too and enjoy those Black Friday sales!

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  5. swritings November 18, 2016 / 2:31 pm

    Incredibly spooky! I actually felt like looking over my shoulder! Great write!☺

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  6. Shivangi November 18, 2016 / 4:12 pm

    Scary tale…kept me hooked till the end. Super excellent story!

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  7. sailajaP14 November 18, 2016 / 4:35 pm

    OMG! Was hoping till the end that I knew, in my heart, was inevitable! Oh, these Banshees!

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