November Notes: Poem – Day 10 –  Tanka – “Air Space” #amwriting #novembernotes #music #poetry


Today’s prompt song is “Air” by Rayvon Owen. 

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“Air” – Rayvon Owen

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Holding onto air, 

Nothing even their, it’s all–

Turning into air.

Can’t make something from nothing. 

Can’t take back time, do-over. 

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Your silhouette, 

It’s disappearing into —

Air so thin, can’t breath. 

All we have is a shattered–

Empty past, hanging by a thread. 

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We were never whole, 

The definition of good. 

We were always flawed, 

We never healed, didn’t —

Accept, when we saw the end. 

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Splinters of glass hurt, 

When embedded in my skin, 

Pieces of the past, 

They’re a pain felt rawly, 

A pain that doesn’t improve.

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The clock ticking by, 

You grasp for my form — I’m air, 

You can keep trying. 

You know your holding thin air, 

Us, we’re gone, invisible. 

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Let the lights burn out, 

We can’t raise what’s  cold and dead. 

The past remains gone, 

Stop holding onto air, it —

Isn’t real; we’ve both dissolved.

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Life’s not fair, I’m sure —

Later we’ll know we did right. 

Now we gasp for air, 

Let conversation cease, fade. 

Nothing to say, it’s been said. 

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©Mandibelle16. (2016)All Rights Reserved. 


10 thoughts on “November Notes: Poem – Day 10 –  Tanka – “Air Space” #amwriting #novembernotes #music #poetry

  1. Amanda, I really like your use of the multiple tankas. All of the tankas are wonderful, each can stand alone and together you’ve created a marvelous poem of loss and realization. The metaphor of air is ideal, and visually perfect. I love the following lines,

    “All we have is a shattered–
    Empty past, hanging by a thread.”

    Sad but true. Wishing you well, I hope that you’re enjoying your weekend. Take care. ~ Mia 🙂

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    1. Thanks Mia. It was based off the music video. Frankly, I didn’t know the song but it’s part of a month long prompt series on songs. I’m happy you liked the tankas. I enjoy the form and find I often need more than one to explain what I have to write. Thanks again. Enjoy your Sunday

      Amanda

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      1. You’re very welcome Amanda. You’re very inspiring, as you are able to keep up with so many of the prompts, always well dome. I so agree with you, I really enjoy the writer that uses a series of tankas, or haikus to create a finished piece, a great challenge too. Thank you, I hope that you’re enjoying your Sunday as well. ~ Mia

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