Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Over Troubled Waters #amwriting #paranormal #flashfiction

Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting FFftAW:


Credit: Joy Pixley


“When you’re down and out / When you’re on the street / When evening falls so hard /I will comfort you (ooo) / I’ll take your part, oh, when darkness comes / And pain is all around / Like a bridge over troubled water / I will lay me down / Like a bridge over troubled water / I will lay me down.” – “Bridge Over Troubled Water” – Simon and Garfunkel 


Wes called up to a young woman sitting on the bridge ledge. 

He gulped and climbed up beside her, assessing her. She shook her head, “I’m not here to jump, it’s only peaceful up here.” 

He settled beside the woman on edge. “I’m Wes,” he said, “I’m not a fan of heights. I don’t understand how you can sit here and find it tranquil.” 

She laughed, “I’m Becca, Wes. Scoot back and look at everything from this gorgeous view.” 

“See, the moon’s a giant light in the sky illuminating everything so the bridge doesn’t feel eerie at night. Now, look at the water below you.” 

He peered down: “I see darkness, turbulence, and fear. I see a river where too many people have jumped and drowned in.”

“You see this bridge as dangerous Wes. But without the bridge, no one would get across to the otherside. Without people in our life–our friends, loved ones, God, helpful strangers –we wouldn’t make it through troubled waters.

“Yeah, I know Becca,” he said.”It’s like the song by Simon and Garfunkel.” 

“Sometimes, we help ourselves, with a little effort.” 


“You stopped yourself, having every intention of jumping before you saw me,” Becca said gently. 

You saved me Becca,”  Wes admitted. 

She shook her head and smiled, disintegrating. He gasped, carefully, moving off the ledge onto the bridge’s walkway. 

Wes ran home; he had hope.


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

29 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Over Troubled Waters #amwriting #paranormal #flashfiction

  1. michnavs November 3, 2016 / 3:41 am

    I love the wisdom behind the troubled water…

    Wes is a character every one could relate to…

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  2. Joyfrida November 3, 2016 / 8:21 am

    Beautiful tale. Glad she was there to help him through his tough time.

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  3. Iain Kelly November 3, 2016 / 8:58 am

    Nice twist at the end, glad she was there to save him. Well written 🙂

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  4. Ameena k.g November 3, 2016 / 10:35 am

    Awww, what a beautiful way to put hope. It seems to me That Wes might not be the first person Becca has dissuaded successfully from not jumping.

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    • mandibelle16 November 3, 2016 / 6:15 pm

      I would hope so. I’m not even sure what she is actually, perhaps, that last vestiges of hope in a jumpers mind, an apparition of some sort willing them to live. Thank you Ameena. I appreciate your reading this piece.


  5. Priceless Joy November 3, 2016 / 7:48 pm

    I love this Mandi! I think Becca is an angel! She was put there to help Wes have hope again. Wonderful story!

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    • mandibelle16 November 3, 2016 / 10:13 pm

      Thanks PJ. I’m really pleased you like it. I was trying to go for something more unique.


      • Priceless Joy November 3, 2016 / 11:17 pm

        It really is unique! Was she not an angel? It said she started disintegrating – that’s what made me think she was an angel.

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      • mandibelle16 November 4, 2016 / 2:07 am

        I wasn’t sure actually. She could be an angel or perhaps, a soul who jumped herself and decided to stay at that bridge to stop others from doing the same. My other thought is she –whatever she is, is an apparition of his imagination. He imagines her and its like the good part of him fighting, to not let himself jump. I haven’t decided which one yet. But an angel would be simple and very fitting ❤️


      • Priceless Joy November 4, 2016 / 2:41 am

        I really like what you thought she could be! Very imaginative!!

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  6. Joan November 4, 2016 / 11:16 am

    Indeed, a bridge, we all need one. great piece

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  7. Lynn Love November 5, 2016 / 3:36 pm

    Lovely choice of song and a fitting illustration of the photo and the tale. She was there when he really needed help and now he has a future. We should all have a friend like Becca! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 November 5, 2016 / 11:32 pm

      I think so for sure! But I’m not quite sure who Becca is. She isn’t alive as a human is, maybe she herself once jumped, perhaps, she is a figment in Wes’s mind, perhaps an angel? Thanks for reading.

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  8. michael1148humphris November 7, 2016 / 12:12 am

    I loved what you did with this story, the way you told it was great.

    Liked by 1 person

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