#OctPoWriMo – Day 20 – Tetracyts – “Forgive” #amwriting #poetry

Day 20 Prompt: White“White has so many connotations, white flag, white hat – hero in the old west movies, white – purity, white – clean, white light, white clouds, and the list could go on. What is the first thing that comes to mind when you think of white? Start from there and write for ten minutes.”


Reclining Woman 20th Century Credit: Aspire Auctions



As Blank, 

As the stare, 

On your pale face, 

Wished to tell you the truth but it wasn’t —

Enough; you appeared sickly, tears rolled down. 


Anger, pain unrolled, 

Exposed your soft, 




Not the, 

Best person, 

But I love you, 

Does that count for anything or are my —

Sins to severe?  Your eyes blink and I hope. 


Black eyes so, 






Carved face stoic. 

Was trying to heal us, bring the truth to light. 

Your eyes begin sparkling, what was cold, now’s —

Beauty alive, 

Life spinning, 

Grace gifts, 



Hair flies, 

Hands emote and —

Your glad laugh rings. 

Distracting beauty forgives; peace of mind. 



“Tetracrys [is] a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing. [It] consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. Tetractys can also bereversed and written 10, 4, 3, 2, 1. 

Double Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1
Triple Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1, 1, 2, 3, 4, 10.” 

Please see Shadow Poetry for more information.


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7 thoughts on “#OctPoWriMo – Day 20 – Tetracyts – “Forgive” #amwriting #poetry

  1. rosemawrites October 23, 2016 / 9:11 am

    such a lovely take, Mandi. most of all, these lines hurt:

    Not the,

    Best person,

    But I love you”


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    • mandibelle16 October 23, 2016 / 8:14 pm

      Thanks again. Yeah I think of the phrase just because a person can’t love you the way you want them to love you, doesn’t mean they don’t love you just as much as you love them.

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  2. clcouch123 October 23, 2016 / 7:12 pm

    This study of ice, marble, pale, Narnian women is fantastic. Offering love–isn’t that enough, even with all we aren’t along with all we are? You pose the right challenges, Amanda!

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    • mandibelle16 October 23, 2016 / 8:05 pm

      Thank you Christopher. I picture her as stone, like the Narnian Queen almost, lovely but at first cold and unforgiving. Much like the statue in the picture turned awY from her husband/boyfriend/lover but at the end spring comes and the ice melts and she is full of dance and joy and movement.

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