#OctPoWriMo – Day 5 – Blitz Poem – “Sharp Is the Knife” #poetry #amwriting


Day 5 Prompt: Sharp

“When I first think of something sharp, pain comes to mind but then I think of an A sharp or a B sharp. Of course there are sharp turns, sharp angles and “He’s looking sharp.” and let’s not forget, sharp as a tack and look sharp.” 

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Not the sharpest knife in the drawer.
Not the brightest crayon in the box. 

Boxes need opening with sharp knives.

Boxes, trapped in our boxes, locked.

Lock it up tight. 

Lock it or else 

Else in the morning you’re to blame

Else, you’ll lose your job, what then

Then you don’t know

Then you can’t tell

Tell nothing because

Tell nothing they say

Say you’re not bright

Say you’re a bit dim

Dim as shadow

Dim as a dark room

Rooms, you’ve not one your own

Rooms are nothing, you’re vagrant 

Vagrant wandering needs people 

Vagrant wandering seeking close

Close enough, no one will steal

Close enough, no one will think

Think you’re more than homeless

Think you’re more than a mistake

Mistaken once, but you’re capable

Mistaken once, but you’re smart

Smart, can you appear that way

Smart, most people aren’t

Aren’t life smart

Aren’t more than book smart

Smart, who cares when you’ve no food

Smart, who cares when you’re so cold

Cold eyes of people staring

Cold hearts of people cracking

Cracking your bubble 

Cracking your safety zone

Zone of space around you

Zone of personal space

Space is all around you

Space, there is too much of it

It, means a place you can stay 

It is a place called home

Home, needs a job to pay for 

Home, lost because you weren’t sharp

Sharp is the knife that cuts in life.

Sharp is the knife that cuts in life.

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The Blitz Poem
“The Blitz Poem, a poetry form created by Robert Keim.
This form of poetry is a stream of short phrases and images with repetition and rapid flow. 
Begin with one short phrase, it can be a cliché. Begin the next line with another phrase that begins with the same first word as line 1. The first 48 lines should be short, but at least two words.

The third and fourth lines are phrases that begin with the last word of the 2nd phrase, the 5th and 6th lines begin with the last word of the 4th line, and so on, continuing, with each subsequent pair beginning with the last word of the line above them, which establishes a pattern of repetition. 

Continue for 48 total lines with this pattern, And then the last two lines repeat the last word of line 48, then the last word of line 47.
The title must be only three words, with some sort of preposition or conjunction joining the first word from the third line to the first word from the 47th line, in that order.
There should be no punctuation. When reading a BLITZ, it is read very quickly, pausing only to breathe.” 
Please see Shadow Poetry for further information. 

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Apologies, the whole bolded text above should be indented but my WordPress App is misbehaving. 

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Deserved. 

14 thoughts on “#OctPoWriMo – Day 5 – Blitz Poem – “Sharp Is the Knife” #poetry #amwriting

  1. rosemawrites October 6, 2016 / 2:34 am

    oh wooow. your poem’s beat and meaning are on point! thank you for the info about the form! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 October 6, 2016 / 2:38 am

      Most welcome. I always post type of poem info first time around sometimes first two. Some forms look hard but once you do it, it’s not so bad 🙂 Glad you liked.

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      • rosemawrites October 6, 2016 / 3:02 am

        yeah. i would agree! though you ca surely ace lengthy forms, Mandi. 😀 ❤

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      • mandibelle16 October 6, 2016 / 4:00 am

        Thank you. You’re just the opposite. You have such fine thoughtful detail in few lines most often. You must be a details person. 🙂

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  2. maria October 6, 2016 / 5:58 am

    Wow! Deep and profound piece, Mandi. I enjoyed the flow of your words. I especially love these lines,

    Cold eyes of people staring
    Cold hearts of people cracking
    Cracking your bubble
    Cracking your safety zone

    ~ ❤

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  3. ghostmmnc October 6, 2016 / 2:18 pm

    Very good! Love the subject and how it all goes together. The blitz form is one of my favorites to do. Seems you do one, you want to do some more of them! 🙂

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  4. jademwong October 6, 2016 / 2:44 pm

    Oooh you tackled the Blitz Poem! Nice job Mandi! Great flow made it easy to read 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 October 6, 2016 / 4:51 pm

      I loved the form of this one Jade. A new one for me, but I loved it 🙂 Thanks for commenting ❤️

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  5. clcouch123 October 6, 2016 / 11:12 pm

    Dynamic pace in verbal action. The interplay of words is dramatic, as is the theme of being sharp or not. And what we make of that. Intelligent and instructive, Amanda!

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    • mandibelle16 October 7, 2016 / 1:09 am

      Thanks Christopher. It’s an interesting form. Perfect for “sharp.”

      Like

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