Friday Fictioneer: Gone For A Swim #flashfiction #amwriting

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff for hosting FF. 

Credit: CEAyr


 “You don’t ever come out here on this balcony alone, don’t open the doors, and no going into the river,” Sandra told her daughters sternly. 

“Why Mommy?” Mia and Ilah asked. 

“You can’t swim my dears. If you fall into the river you’ll drown. Mommy would be so sad without her girls.” 


A day into vacation, Sandra left briefly to buy sandwiches for Mia and Ilah.  

As soon as their Mom left, the girls unlocked the balcony doors and pulling a chair outside, both of them climbed up onto the balcony ledge. 

“Want to go in?” Ilah asked Mia. She nodded and they held each others’ hands and jumped. 

 Sandra returned to hear her girls’ screams. She dove in the river to save them but it was of no use. 

Tears mixed with water as she realized, her daughters were gone. 


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.  


30 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneer: Gone For A Swim #flashfiction #amwriting”

  1. This is awfully sad but it does go well with the picture and the names of the girls are creative as well. Good job.
    I am glad when Dewey was near a river that he didn’t drown 🙂 He made a surprise showing today 🙂

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    1. Yes, I’m going to be reading about Dewey’s last couple adventures tonight. For small kid, I think you’d have to watch them so close to this water. It would be too tempting for little ones.

      Mia is a pretty common name I think more recently. Ilah or Isla, has been around a long time. My friend named her daughter Ilah and the actress Isla Fisher, has the other spelling of the name 🙂 The movies that come to mind of her being are Wedding Crashers and The Shopaholic movie from the Shopaholic books.

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      1. Forgive me intruding on your conversation, ladies, but Islay – pronounced eye-la – is one of the larger Scottish islands, famous for its malt whisky and its archaeological interest. There have been finds of arrow heads as old as 10,000 years BC. Yes, ten thousand. Anyway, it has long been used as a girl’s name in Scotland, so it has undoubtedly travelled.

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  2. Dear Mandibelle,

    Sad story. Mama underestimated her daughters’ abilities to get out.
    Note: When posting your URL for your link, make sure it’s for your story and not just your blog so the reader doesn’t have to scroll through the story after it. I hope that makes sense.



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    1. Hi Rochelle,

      Glad you liked the story despite its sadness. My apologies, I’ve linked to many flashfiction challenges using the correct link before using the button, with the right story. It wasn’t something I’d realized I’d done.

      Thanks for the heads up.


    1. Thanks again PJ for reading and your kind comments. Yes, the girls didn’t listen. Also they are young maybe like around four years old, so maybe it wasn’t a great thing to leave them alone even four fifteen minutes to get food. The water was too tempting.


    1. That’s a good point. Vital to start them in the water early. I have a brother though, never made it past ‘yellow’ or level 1 or maybe he completed it. He hated the water and swimming. One time at the Lake his floating raft drifted to far, Mom ran in all dressed to make sure he didn’t go to far out. So yes, kids need to learn, like it or not.

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    1. Thank you CE. I know I had a word count for this, sorry to disappoint. But I write what I think and when things make me think . ..
      hugs my friend and Happy Thanksgiving. It’s this weekend in Canada. 🍁


  3. This reads like the beginning of a fairy tale or folk tale – to warn one of the dangers of not listening to mother, of leaving your young children alone, of not learning to swim? I’m one who doesn’t know how to swim despite taking lessons as an adult.

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    1. Yeah, I suppose it could be like a true fairytale, where the children really did get lost or go missing. I’m not the best swimmer, but I can do basic swimming, backstroke, and floating and treading. It’s harder to learn as an adult I bet so good for you for trying!

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