Photo (Music) Challenge: Poem – LaJemme – “All of Her” #poetry #amwriting #music


Thanks to MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie for hosting this week’s music challenge. This one brought back memories of teenage angst and pain. It was one of my favourite bands and songs in high school. The band for this week’s prompt is Evanescence and their song: “My Immortal.” 

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Evanescence – “My Immortal”

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source: http://www.schumansblogspot.com

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Childess fear, devoice, perfectly placed; your words.

Compelling words, you’re afraid, have no voice.

Love, not a choice, it hurts; guess it’s for the birds

Faltering, smothered; clear you sing no choice

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Suffer, no relief uncovered.

Linger, another wound betrayed so.

Resonating light, preserved false love.

Scoundrel, thieving; she is wasting.

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Wipe bruising tears, yours deceiving.

Crocodile pours saltwater, stings.

Petals droop, swims face down, soul forming

Nothing left, sinner stole her soul’s wings

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 Captivating man, just leave her within

Solid glass splits; why is life frustrating?

Fractured from ripping, your words scream flitting.

Untrustworthy, you’ve stole all her being. 

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Give her up, let her go; life moves forward.

She sheltered, faltered not; tears and regrets, 

She rebuilds, sets constructing her torn heart

Disappeared; tells herself you two never met

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LaJemme

The LaJemme is a 5 stanza form created by poets Laura Lamarca and Jem Farmer.
Meter: consistently iambic
Stanza 1, 10 syllables per line, Rhyme scheme abab, 4th syllable of each line is to rhyme with the end rhyme of the preceding line.
Stanza 2, syllable count: 8/8/8/6, Rhyme scheme cdef, with cross rhymes in each couplet on 4th syllable
Stanza 3, syllable count 8/8/8/6, Rhyme scheme gfdf, 4th syllable of each line follows the same rule as stanza 1.
Stanza 4, 10 syllables per line, Rhyme scheme hihi, 4th syllable of each line is to rhyme with the end rhyme of the preceding line.
Stanza 5, 10 syllables per line, Rhyme scheme abab, 4th syllable of each line is to rhyme with the end rhyme of the preceding line.

Please see www.shadowpoetry.com for more information.

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©Mandibelle16.(2016) All Rights Reserved

11 thoughts on “Photo (Music) Challenge: Poem – LaJemme – “All of Her” #poetry #amwriting #music

    • mandibelle16 September 24, 2016 / 3:02 am

      She is isn’t she? Gorgeous voice. One of my fav CD’s was her first one.

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      • Simon September 24, 2016 / 7:40 am

        Wasn’t that fallen? With her voice she could sing in classical genres well not just the hard rock. That’s the beauty of it.

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  1. sanaarizvi September 24, 2016 / 11:27 am

    Whistles!!! ❤❤ Oh this is absolutely stunning, Mandi 😀 I love the choice of form for this poem.. its so very elegant in all its glory! Love the lines “Wipe bruising tears, yours deceiving. Crocodile pours saltwater, stings. Petals droop, swims face down, soul forming. Nothing left, sinner stole her soul’s wings” they truly capture the essence of the song. Beautifully rendered. Thank you so much for participating at MLMM ❤❤

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    • mandibelle16 September 24, 2016 / 5:10 pm

      Thank you so much. I’m happy you liked the poem. It’s a new form for me, and was difficult to get right. I’m glad to participate. The challenges on this site are great! Thank you again.

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  2. rosemawrites September 26, 2016 / 1:29 am

    a tricky form, a lovely song, and a perfectly put poem! Very very very good job, Mandi!

    P.S.
    You might want to edit this part: ” Captivtivating man, just leave her within.”
    I think you mean captivating? 🙂 ❤

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    • mandibelle16 September 26, 2016 / 1:34 am

      Haha yep. I’m constantly warring with autocorrect on my Ipad. It likes to invent even more words than I do. Thanks for letting my know. It is tricky but fun. Try it 🙂 I’ll try another one this week I think .

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      • rosemawrites September 26, 2016 / 1:51 am

        HAHAHA! that autocorrect should have its own dictionary? 😀

        I can sense the fun, my dear. 🙂 go girl!

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