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Sunday Photo Fiction: Still His #amwriting #flashfiction


Thanks to Alistair Forbes for hosting SPF.

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A Mixed Bag

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Caden wasn’t sure how he arrived at the park; his feet had walked themselves there. He sat on a park bench feeling empty and worthless. In front of him sat an old Chinese stove, but he gave it little thought. 

He’d lost Caroline for real this times and Caden didn’t know how to get her back. Lyrics from the song playing in the pub as she walked away from him, were on a continuel loop in his mind; she loved that song. He sighed, begging his mind to forget the painful lyrics.

“She’s imperfect but she tries, she is good but she lies. She is hard on herself, she is broken and won’t ask for help. She is messy but she’s kind, she’s is lonely –most of the time. She is all of this mixed up and baked in a beautiful pie; she is gone but she used to be mine.” 

Caden hadn’t ever felt so low. What did a man do when the woman he thought he’d stay with forever disappeared and wouldn’t talk to him? 

No one seemed to know where Caroline was. He had almost cried in front of her Dad saying he only wanted to apologize and win her back. Caroline’s Dad patted Caden on the back saying,”Things will get better soon.” 

Caden stared at the odd Chinese Stove wondering what its purpose was. He attempted to distract himself with the stove as the lyrics from that damn song floated back to him:

“If I’m honest I know I would give it all back for a chance to start over and rewrite an ending or two. For the girl that I knew who’ll be reckless just enough, who’ll get hurt but, who learns how to toughen up when she’s bruised . . . she is gone but she used to be mine.” 

Caden pressed his hands against his ears, trying to block the words out. 

Suddenly, Caroline was standing in front of him, “How did you get here?” He asked her.

She gazed at him, “You look horrible Caden. Did I do that to you?” 

He gasped shocked at seeing her, truly there now sitting beside him. Caden couldn’t hold back, he cried into Caroline’s neck as she stroked his hair; he held onto her tightly. 

“I thought you would never forgive me,” he said. 

“It’s alright,” she crooned to him, “I’m not leaving you ever again.” 

Caroline was still Caden’s girl. 

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Sara Barielles – “She Used to Be Mine” 

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Lyrics from AZlyrics Sara Barielles Lyrics.

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

33 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: Still His #amwriting #flashfiction”

  1. Okay I have to admit, I really liked the love story between Caden and Caroline. It was equally sweet and heartbreaking, because you could feel how much Caden loved her and the remorse he felt at losing her (almost). But I’m not sure how the Chinese Stove plays a part? Why did Caroline appear after he stared at the Stove? (It’s possible that I’m just missing the answer somehow lol…)
    Regardless, a lovely story Mandi! 🙂

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    1. I’m not sure why she appeared. It’s one of those things, he’s lost in his own remorse, and thinking of her. Suddenly, she’s there, having been thinking about him to. The stove is just a feature in the park. I’ll look at the story, make it clearer.

      Thanks Jade 💕

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  2. The stove does represent a kind of constancy. Inventive narrative. Heartful (a word I keep using, even though spell-check doesn’t like it). The merging of setting, lyrics, attitudes, and actions comes across successfully. I can easily image all this, Mandi, as it happens. Which speaks to your skill.

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  3. A very nice romantic story. I’m glad to know she has come back to him and I’m sure he will make things right between them…whatever happened. Often times a short break-up will make a relationship even stronger when each of them have time to reflect on things. I love the song and it goes well with the story.

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    1. Thank you Jessie. Yes the song is great. It was the perfect place to use it, I’ve been sitting on it for a couple weeks but couldn’t come up with anything. I would think Caden did something that really annoyed her, he didn’t listen, she got fed up and left for a while.

      And I agree, I think sometimes fights make relationships stronger because the truth comes out — flaws and all and you love the person anyways. I think Caroline leaves and finds perspective, so she comes back and stays 🙂 🎈

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  4. I’ve broken up with a few ‘beaus’. And while I wonder at times at the what if’s …I’m happy where I am now and couldn’t imagine being without the one I am with ;).

    I like what you did including the lyrics. Thanks for stopping by. ‘May’ was complete fiction. Though I’ve been in some places where I’ve been the new kid on the block and last to be picked… So maybe there is a touch of reality? Probably there is that ‘touch’ however gentle in all we write.

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