Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Poem – Lunes – “Never Stopped” #amwriting #poetry #flashfiction #lunes

Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting FFftAW.


The Storyteller’s Abode (Louise)


Hidden between rocks, the ocean —

Returns a treasure. 

A time piece once given.


A woman’s long hair blows,

Trailing in winds. 

She inspects the pocket watch —


Before dropping it off the —

Cliff it tumbles, 

Onto rocks, clattering sounds lost —


In the darkness of nights, 

Grip so intense.

Ocean steals the pocket watch —


Woman stares down below peering —

Her Grandfather’s watch,

Forever lost, his presence grieved.


Into cold bitter waters enclosing,

Covered in waves. 

Gone for years, taken away.


Now a small boy picks up —

A watch and —

Smiles, his new treasure found. 


Dangling it infront of him he —

Puts it to —

His ear; ticking, never stopped. 


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved. 

33 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: Poem – Lunes – “Never Stopped” #amwriting #poetry #flashfiction #lunes

  1. Inside the Mind of Isadora August 24, 2016 / 3:20 am

    This is a well executed poem expressing a moment in time when a treasure is discovered. I enjoyed the way you ended the poem with the watch still ticking. Nice write …
    Isadora 😎

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  2. what sandra thinks August 24, 2016 / 5:11 am

    The cycle is complete when the boy finds the still-ticking watch… but this could go on forever when it’s lost again. I love the beautiful story told here.

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    • mandibelle16 August 24, 2016 / 5:13 am

      Thank you Sandra. Yeah you really could. Following the story of this watch, passing from person to person, maybe locked away awhile or tossed back into the ocean. Interesting thoughts 🙂

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  3. rosemawrites August 24, 2016 / 6:00 am

    time will tick until there is no more clock. 🙂 Love how the poem cascaded, Mandi! ❤

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  4. Shivangi August 24, 2016 / 2:48 pm

    Lovely Mandi… So well written in verses! The cycle goes on and on! Too good!

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  5. ghostmmnc August 24, 2016 / 2:56 pm

    It is interesting how lost things sometimes get found, to continue on with someone else. Very good story/poem! 🙂

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  6. jademwong August 24, 2016 / 3:16 pm

    And the cycle continues! This is a beautiful story of life and how it goes on, how it passes on from one person to the next. Superbly done, Mandi 🙂

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  7. yarnspinnerr August 24, 2016 / 3:37 pm

    The ocean is considered to be the giver in many cultures. Great take and beautifully crafted.

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    • mandibelle16 August 24, 2016 / 10:06 pm

      Thanks PJ. Yeah it definitely has a story behind it this watch. Wonderful photo from Louise. I liked this photo prompt a lot 🙂


  8. Jenn August 25, 2016 / 7:07 pm

    I love the rhythm of the poem. It’s like a song. Beautiful.

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  9. nonnaci August 26, 2016 / 11:11 pm

    beautiful metaphor. I like how the transcendental nature of time is preserved by the watch.

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    • mandibelle16 August 29, 2016 / 6:49 pm

      Thanks Jacqueline. Yes exactly, you wonder about old pieces like that. I think many antique pieces etc would have fascinating things to say if they could talk. Happy for your comment. Sorry I was not able to make it to your blog party this weekend. Have a great week.

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