Sunday Photo Fiction: Nineteen-Years Later #flashfiction #amwriting


Thanks to Alistair Forbes who hosts SPF each week.

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A Mixed Bag

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“So why exactly did you choose Loddington House Hotel, Uncle? The shipyard view is not a nice one.” 

“I like the view.” Chad’s Uncle Sam mumbled.

“Errr, I guess it grows on you . . . What’s that you’re peering at through your binoculars? I think people would be creeped out if they saw a guy looking through his hotel window with those.” 

“Well, I’m not a peeping-Tom. It’s the surveillance van. It arrived when we got here exactly and only leaves when we leave.” Uncle Sam muttered.

“Well we’ve hardly left at all. I thought you wanted to come with me to see the University I’m going to be attending. You know, like my Dad would’ve done had he been here.” 

“Chad, there are bigger things going on. The same people who killed your Dad are watching us. What I don’t know, is why?”

“Your Dad was in the Marines Chad; it must have to do with him. But what do they want nineteen-years-later? And what are they trying to accomplish by not hiding their van in plain sight?” Uncle Sam wondered.

Chad’s eyes went wide; his face went pale. He had a feeling their troubles were only beginning.

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

25 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: Nineteen-Years Later #flashfiction #amwriting

  1. Graham Lawrence July 13, 2016 / 5:44 am

    Nice build up to an “I want more” end!

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 5:45 am

      Thanks Graham. Hmm, there could be more. I’d have to think about what exactly lol.

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      • Graham Lawrence July 13, 2016 / 5:47 am

        As Shakespeare might say “Aye, there’s the rub”

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  2. ceayr July 13, 2016 / 10:58 am

    Nicely built tension here, Amanda.
    This piece stands happily alone, but, like the other comments above, I felt it was the start of something more ambitious.
    Do you have something in mind?

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:42 pm

      Hi CE. Thanks for your comment. All I know so far, is the Dad was involved in some covert work of somekind with the Marines when he died and he may of mentioned or said something to Chad’s Uncle Sam. Uncle Sam knows Chad is not safe, although more because of who his father and Uncle are, more than anything else. But if captured, he can be used. The rest may come.

      Thanks 🙂

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  3. swritings July 13, 2016 / 11:33 am

    Ooh, suspenseful! I hope they get the upper hand! 🙂 Great read!

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:40 pm

      I hope so too. Looks like they’ll be more to come on this, not sure about everything yet 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:32 pm

      Thanks PJ. Yes I’m wondering too. All I know so far, is the Dad was involved in some covert work of somekind with the Marines when he died and he may of mentioned or said something to Chad’s Uncle Sam. Uncle Sam knows Chad is not safe, although more because of who his father and Uncle are, more than anything else. But if captured, he can be used. The rest may come.

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  4. patriciaruthsusan July 16, 2016 / 1:10 pm

    Great story that stands alone, Mandibelle, but it would make a great hook for a longer thriller. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  5. Sunday Fiction July 17, 2016 / 12:57 am

    Ooh, what indeed. Sounds like it wasn’t a standard operation his dad had been involved in.

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  6. julespaige July 18, 2016 / 5:13 pm

    A fun start to intrigue –
    Reminds me of the Crime Investigation Series I like to watch.
    I’m not so sure what much less who ‘my’ Charlotte is 🙂
    Thanks for stopping by.

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  7. Hemangini August 17, 2016 / 7:40 am

    wow… wonderful start .. Reading it makes me feel like I am reading the beginning of a son’s journey to becoming a sleuth and finding out what happened… WOW!

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