Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: The Candy Store #flashfiction #amwriting

Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting FFftAW each week.




It was an odd store. Adeline, the store owner, insisted only children were allowed to remain inside and make purchases.

Parents would walk in the store and smile when they realized the quaint shop was full of candy, any form of candy which they or their kids craved.

Once meeting the trusted bubbly owner Adeline, parents allowed their kids into the store with their allowance, and often extra money to buy treats for Mom and Dad. 

The candy store was within walking distance and parents began letting their kids go whenever they wished.

Sadly, Adeline was not only a candy connoisseur, but a witch. A witch from the same line of witches Hansel and Grettle had bested; but Adeline had learned from her ancestors.

Magic in the candy made parents forget they had kids, who slowly began disappearing after visiting the candy store enough to have fattened up for Adeline’s candy making.

The affects of the magic on the parents wore off months later when they realized their children were gone. 

All that remained was a store made of candy. 

Adeline had disappeared, moving on to the next town.


©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

37 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: The Candy Store #flashfiction #amwriting

  1. Michael July 13, 2016 / 3:06 am

    Goodness Mandi what a harrowing tale. It would be awful realising months later the kids had gone….I imagine trying to explain it to the police…..very interesting take on the image…well done..

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:09 am

      Thanks Michael. The house in the picture made me think of Hansel and Grettle. It would be awful to find your children gone. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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      • Michael July 13, 2016 / 3:11 am

        My pleasure. I’ve been watching a TV series called Heartland which is set in Alberta all those snow covered mountains in the background of some beautiful landscapes.

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      • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 4:10 am

        Oh yes, my Dad was watching that one too. I’ve seen quite a few episodes. Where I am we are fairly close to the mountains but can’t quite see them. But a two or three hour drive and their are lovely places such as Banff, Canmore and Jasper. Beautiful places to hike, explore, rock climb, ski in the winter, or just enjoy. Good vacation if you ever have the chance to visit Alberta 🙂

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      • Michael July 13, 2016 / 4:11 am

        The more I watch the more tempting it becomes….we have nothing like that landscape in Australia

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  2. Graham Lawrence July 13, 2016 / 5:46 am

    The Candy Witch! What an original take 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 5:48 am

      Thank you. These modern witches have new ways, having learned from witches in fairytales and folklore 🙂

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      • Graham Lawrence July 13, 2016 / 5:50 am

        Yes. Witchcraft through Social Media is an interesting concept 🙂

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      • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 5:23 pm

        Lol. You are so nice. Thank you I’m happy you thought so. I had to shorten it a lot from the original. But I find the best short fiction stories are like that, you cut away so what’s left is only what’s needed to be said. I’m sure you find that at your work as well. Have a great night/day.

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      • rosemawrites July 14, 2016 / 2:07 am

        Oh wow. that is so true. 😉 that’s the wonderful thing about flash fictions. 😉

        Have a great night too, Mandi!

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  3. swritings July 13, 2016 / 11:36 am

    I love how you connected her with the witch in Hansel and Gretel! Wonderful idea! Great read! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:36 pm

      I hope so. I guess we can’t assume anyone, even hose who seem like good people, always are. Thank you Melinda for your thoughts 🙂

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      • Melinda Kucsera July 14, 2016 / 2:04 pm

        You’re welcome 🙂 And one should never trust the owner of a candy store especially now when we know how unhealthy candy is. You gotta wonder about someone who sets out to sell candy and only candy in the face of that.

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      • mandibelle16 July 14, 2016 / 4:22 pm

        You are right. But funny enough, in certain places around Canada in tourist destinations, there are places who only sell candy, of many different kinds. As a kid coming across such stores, it was a goldmine. Funny enough as well, close to my neighbourhood, is a small area of shops in the neighbourhood of highlands. There is a coffee shop and book place, a few designer shops, a few restaurants, an antique store, and you guessed it — a shop that only sells candy ( as far as I know). Thanks again Melinda.

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      • Melinda Kucsera July 14, 2016 / 4:44 pm

        You’re welcome 🙂 Those stores are spreading obesity and encouraging it. So sad.


    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:36 pm

      Yes indeed. I hope she does too. Although, I don’t know how you defeat someone with such powerful magic, who can disappearance fade away at a snap of her fingers. Thanks for commenting Jacqueline 🙂

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  4. Priceless Joy July 13, 2016 / 1:19 pm

    Such an evil witch! Fattening up the children to make candy out of them! Yuck! I wouldn’t want to eat that candy! Haha! Great story Mandi! You really pulled me into it.

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    • mandibelle16 July 13, 2016 / 3:34 pm

      Haha. It’s probably the most tasty candy there is and you wouldn’t realize it was children. Thanks for commenting PJ 🙂

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  5. Copper Cranes July 13, 2016 / 2:57 pm

    Wonderful spin on a classic fairytale. I’m quite sure the Grimm brothers would be just as delighted by your flash fiction as I am. The power of candy, yay! Enjoy your day. ~ Mia

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  6. luckyjc007 July 15, 2016 / 5:11 am

    Such a clever witch! And, what a terrible shock the parents went though when they realized their children were gone! They could never explain the unexplainable. A very enjoyable story.

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    • mandibelle16 July 15, 2016 / 5:51 am

      Thank you Jessie. If fairy tale heroes and heroines evolve with modern times, I think villains would too 🙂

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  7. athling2001 July 16, 2016 / 2:08 pm

    Wow – what a twisted and imaginative story! Great job! I love the thought of the lines of witches coming down through the years.

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    • mandibelle16 July 16, 2016 / 2:42 pm

      Thank you Athling. Yeah, I figure being able to do magi would have to have a genetic component eh? Like any other talent.

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