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Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner:  Outsmarted #amwriting #flashfiction


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I’v never been to Florida. I didn’t think hiking around the condo we rented out would be anything exciting. But I was wrong.

Hiking down the gravel trail with my friend, we ran into some giant alligators lumbering about a waterhole. 

“Oh my god,” Patricia said shrieking. “Huge alligators. What do we do? Can we walk around them?” 

As if he was listening, one of the alligators crawled over onto the gravel path. Patricia was in hysterics and I wasn’t sure if we should both turn around or try to walk around the alligator on his left side, away from their watering hole on his right.

I picked up a long thick piece of wood, poking the alligator and trying to force him to move right, back to where a couple of his friends sat half in the water.

“Come on guy, that’s it grab the stick.” I muttered. 

With his jaws wide and ferocious, the alligator bit the piece of wood and pulled. When he had moved over enough as he pulled on the stick, and the alligator wasn’t in our path anymore, I instinctively let go of the piece of wood.

When I turned around Patricia was no where in sight. I thought she had gone back to the condo.

Then I saw the alligators rolling and twisting, fighting over prey in the water. I felt sick and afraid.

“No it can’t be,” I cried.

I had been outsmarted. While the alligator on the path was distracting me, the others had gone after Patricia. All that was left was a scrap of her pink yoga pants.

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26 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner:  Outsmarted #amwriting #flashfiction”

  1. Having lived in Florida for 20 years and having been chased by alligators, I can relate to this story. I’m not sure they are quite that clever in reality, but giving them pack hunting mentality makes this story even more frightening. The pink yoga pants was a nice touch too…lol. Well done, Amanda.

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    1. Actually it was two female friends. The main character was trying to get the alligator to move off the pathway. Unfortunately, while the main characters back was turned (while the alligator on the path distracted her) her friend Patricia got eaten by the other gators near the water. Tragic story. Happy you enjoyed.

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    1. Hi Joan. Thank you it is a horribly sad situation. Luckily, in real life, I don’t believe alligators are smart enough to lure their prey using distraction techniques. Thanks for reading.

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