Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: A Gorgeous View #amwriting #flashfiction


Thank you to Priceless Joy for hosting FFftAW.

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Barbera Taylor

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This city makes me dream of better things. From this view, it’s a paradise of skyscrapers grazing the winter sky. The windowed buildings glint in the sunlight. The light causes them to gleam, despite their varied shades of colour. There is a blue-green skyscraper fading into dirty brown, and other skyscrapers which are variations of grey and black. Some of the older buildings are a dull sandstone and ivory marble. 

Each building is unique. Certain buildings are modern and geometric and certain buildings are tall with pointed tops. Other buildings are layered, flowing down like ancient ziggurats, while other buildings are of a more recent era in the nineteenth and early twentieth-century. They’re the prettiest buildings, their historicism copied using the lovingly designed architecture of late gothic and early-Renaissance cathedrals.

I call this city my home but I hardly gaze at it from this view. The snow lies as delicate white lace beneath my booted feet and I think, such beauty we have here.

Yet, in this beauty of skyscrapers, snow, and sunlight shimmering, they’re few places to rest for an aged homeless man.

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©Mandibelle16.(2016) All Rights Reserved.

37 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: A Gorgeous View #amwriting #flashfiction

  1. jademwong June 1, 2016 / 4:40 am

    I love that you decided to focus on the architecture. The buildings really are works of art!

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 4:41 am

      Thank you Jade. I think from the view the person is sitting, it’s what you’d notice 🙂

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  2. Ameena k.g June 1, 2016 / 5:21 am

    You gave every building it’s unique identity with your descriptions Mandi. I love how you begand with the description of what seemed like the perfect place and then ended with the sad old man. Loved it.

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 5:39 am

      Thank you Ameena. Maybe part of the beauty is that for him this place is untouchable; not a place he feels is home Thanks for your thoughts Ameena💗

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 5:37 am

      Yeah, it’s unfortunate. To see such a beautiful city but not have a place in it that’s home. Thank you for reading and commenting Lisa 🙂

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  3. rosemawrites June 1, 2016 / 7:48 am

    Love how you beautifully highlighted the irony in this piece, a city with lovely architectures but a man can’t find a home in it. Great job, my friend!

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  4. swritings June 1, 2016 / 9:56 am

    I love how he focused so passionately on the beauty of the buildings, yet, deep down reality hits him . Great story!

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 6:32 pm

      Thank you S. Yes in a beautiful city, the city of his dreams, but no place to call home. I hope he finds on. Thanks for reading and your comments.

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  5. maria June 1, 2016 / 11:05 am

    Despite being homeless and living alone amidst that concrete jungle, he still can see the beauty that most people are too busy to stop and appreciate. There is a tinge of sadness in this piece but I can’t help but smile with the man’s optimism. I’m sure that when night comes and all he has is a cold pavement to sleep with, his eyes will see through the moonlit sky and over the glittering stars. For he’s a man with good eyes and vision. 🙂 Great inspiring piece, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 6:28 pm

      Wow your read of the piece is pretty bang on. Yes, he sees the beauty many miss but I still hope he finds a warm shelter to sleep. Thank you for reading and your insightful comments 🙂

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      • maria June 2, 2016 / 5:42 am

        Coz I enjoyed reading your story. 🙂 Me too, I hope he finds a warm shelter to sleep…

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  6. Priceless Joy June 1, 2016 / 1:00 pm

    I love how you focused on the buildings and described them so well! I also loved the twist at the end of it being a homeless man! Great story, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 6:23 pm

      Thank you PJ. Yes, when I looked at this picture the view really struck me. It’s beautiful how the sun reflects on the buildings. But it is a sad kind of beauty in they end, if you can’t find home in somewhere you love. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

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  7. The Voice June 1, 2016 / 2:11 pm

    You turned a beautiful descriptive writing piece into a wonderful narrative with that last line. Such a great blend of storytelling, Amanda. Well done.

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    • mandibelle16 June 1, 2016 / 6:21 pm

      Thank you so much. I’m happy you enjoyed this piece. The view from where the person was sitting really struck me. Picturesque. Thanks for commenting Chris.

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  8. any1mark66 June 1, 2016 / 7:29 pm

    Nice descriptions of the scene. Better to sneak in the homeless guy as the character. 😉

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  9. Michael June 2, 2016 / 1:03 am

    Its the modern dilemma for the modern homeless man, all that shelter and no where to rest his head….you’ve written a great comment on society Mandi..

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  10. bikurgurl June 2, 2016 / 6:57 am

    I agree with the fresh take on the architecture – it’s really a work of art itself!

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  11. Jenn June 2, 2016 / 4:48 pm

    I always worry about the homeless when the weather turns cold, or blisteringly hot, like it gets where I live. I hope this guy finds shelter. Great story, I loved the descriptions.

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    • mandibelle16 June 6, 2016 / 3:34 pm

      Thanks for your thoughts Jacqueline. Yes sadly there are, no matter how many beautiful buildings or places people could live, some always don’t have a home.

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    • mandibelle16 June 6, 2016 / 8:58 pm

      Hi Jacqueline. Just published your Interview. I hope you like it. Cheers!

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