Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: My Pet Lucy


Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting the FFftAW prompt each week.

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Yinglan

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I decided to take Lucy for a walk in the park today. She’s an ‘indoor’ raptor but she plays outside in our large yard. 

I remember when we found her four-years -ago…

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“Dad, what’s this?” I asked.

” It’s hatching from the egg.” He said. We both watched as a tiny baby raptor was born.

“She won’t be big. She’s a tiny version of a raptor.” We told my Mom.

She sighed. “I heard that same comment about the last pet we had.”  Lucy squeaked. She was Mom’s girl from then on.

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I put Lucy’s leash on, petting on her belly. Lucy’s docile and loves our family. She even tries to lay beside us at night.

I set Lucy free on the off leash trail. She catches a couple of rabbits, devouring them.

A women goes by with her two mastiffs: “That animal is an abomination.”

I shrug.”She ate a poodle once. But she’s much better now.” 

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

31 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writer: My Pet Lucy

  1. Priceless Joy May 17, 2016 / 11:27 pm

    Hahahaha! This is hilarious and cute! “She ate a poodle once but she’s much better now.” LOL! Cute story, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 May 17, 2016 / 11:28 pm

      Thank you PJ. Your story gave me the idea. You said you were thinking dinosaurs could be docile and I thought what if they’re like dogs or other wild pets people keep. Thanks for commenting.

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  2. joyroses13 May 18, 2016 / 12:38 am

    LOL!!! Love the ending! Too funny! Reminded me of the book I read to my girls a lot about a boy who had a pet alligator 🙂

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      • joyroses13 May 18, 2016 / 12:51 am

        It was a great idea! And if they were tame, I am sure my girl would have been begging for one!! She loved dinosaurs when younger! We have seen all of the Land Before Time DVD’s 🙂

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      • mandibelle16 May 18, 2016 / 12:53 am

        Aw, those are great videos. I think I was too old for them after the second one. The original is my fav and I love the song on the woman sings on it.

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  3. luckyjc007 May 18, 2016 / 4:27 am

    Fun story! I would love to have seen the expression on the woman’s face when told ( “she ate a poodle once”) she was probably tripping on her feet trying to get away!

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  4. rosemawrites May 18, 2016 / 6:59 am

    HAHAHAHA! Okay, Mandi! I am glad my boss isn’t around because I can laugh our loud. GEEZ!!! That last line! HAHAHA
    Clever clever take, Mandi! YOu can creep me out, you can be wise, and you can make me laugh too! GEEZ! What a talented writer you are! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 May 18, 2016 / 6:25 pm

      Aw, thanks Rosema. PJ gave me the idea from her post about dinosaurs being docile. So I thought why not make the raptor like a dog or pet. And just like dogs need training, raptors do too. So she ate a poodle before she was trained better. I’m pretty sure she thinks of herself as a dog now and probably wanted to play with the mastiffs. And I don’t like poodles much so I’m willing to sacrifice one lol. Thanks for the lovely compliment. I’m very happy I made you laugh 🙂

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  5. swritings May 18, 2016 / 11:04 am

    Haha! Love how matter-of-factly she said that the raptor are a poodle!😄 Great story! 😊

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    • mandibelle16 May 18, 2016 / 6:20 pm

      Thanks S. Yeah I imagined this raptor was just like a dog. But even dogs have a wildness in them that we can’t tame, or don’t until they’ve been trained. The same goes with raptors lol. Thank you for your comments 🙂 I’m not a fan of poodles, so I was willing to let the raptor eat one.

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  6. afairymind May 18, 2016 / 7:26 pm

    I’d love to have a tame dinosaur! Great story, Mandi, and I love the last line. 😀

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  7. The Voice May 19, 2016 / 1:16 pm

    I loved this. You started with the “indoor” raptor, which was a great line and finished with her once eating a poodle. Great story, Amanda.

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    • mandibelle16 May 19, 2016 / 3:35 pm

      Thank you Chris. My idea was too have Lucy to almost be just like a dog, but like dogs hunting mice etc they are still wild creatures even when they’re tame. Plus, not a big fan of poodles lol. Happy you enjoyed this.

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  8. Annie May 20, 2016 / 9:33 am

    I love how nonchalant the speaker is. “Oh, yeah Lucy ate a poodle. Oh well.” 😀

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    • mandibelle16 May 20, 2016 / 8:26 pm

      Lol. Thank you. It’s like a dog trained not to eat mice he catches, they learn. So did the raptor 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 May 23, 2016 / 5:06 pm

      Thanks Jacqueline. I loved the idea of having a tame dinosaur as a pet. I think Lucy was actually a little bit disappointed, she wanted to play with the mastiffs. Thanks for your thoughts 🌷

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      • jacquelineobyikocha May 23, 2016 / 5:09 pm

        It’s a sweet story and I don’t think Lucy would have harmed the Mastiff’s.

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