Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner: Next To Her

Thanks to Roger Shipp for hosting FFftPP. Also thank you to The Daily Post for the prompt word Hope




“Why are we going in here?” Karen asked her older cousin Alicia, struggling to carry  the load between them.

“It’s Grandpa’s barn. I remember my Dad helping rebuild it when I was seven-years-old.”

“I like the vintage feel. The lanturne is neat. I bet it’s antique,” Karen said enthused.

“Ah, it’s pretty dusty and dirty in here actually. I’m sure no one has been in here since Grandpa retired.” Alicia said.

“So did you bring a shovel?” Karen inquired.

“There is a couple of shovels in here. We should bury him over there,” Alicia said quietly pointing.

They started digging through the barn’s loose dirt floor. 

“I hope this is deep enough?” Karen asked.”We should do six-feet deep, right?”

“Yeah,” Alicia remarked. “At least he’s close to her here.” Karen gave Alicia a funny look but decided to stay silent.

The cousins carried the body wrapped in blankets to the hole they had dug. 

Breathing heavily after shovelling, they threw the body in the hole and began the slow process of shovelling dirt ontop of the body. 

Karen stopped shortly.”You really think we should be doing this?” 

Alicia sighed.”Grandpa told me to do this. He told me to bury him here next to our Nana when he died.”

“What happened to Nana?” 

“He was mad at her once. In a fit of rage he hit her over the head with the back of a shovel. Grandpa never meant to kill Nana.”

“When did he tell you?” Karen asked. 

“I was there that night, sleeping over. I saw everything and helped Grandpa bury Nana. He was in shock. It was my idea to bury her in the barn.” Alicia admitted.

“I can’t believe he killed her,” Karen said.

THWACK! Alicia’s shovel hit Karen in the head cracking her head like a watermelon.

” I believe it,” Alicia said burying Karen in the grave with her Grandpa.

” You always were their favourite grandchild, cousin.” Alicia smirked. 


©Mandibelle16.(2016) All Rights Reserved.

14 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner: Next To Her

  1. Annie May 7, 2016 / 9:08 am

    Gosh! Didn’t see that coming. Great take on the prompt!

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    • mandibelle16 May 7, 2016 / 5:42 pm

      Thanks Annie. Karenasked too many questions and knew too much. Plus, I think Alicia was jealous of her because Grandpa and Nana liked Karen best, even though Alicia helped Grandpa bury Nana .

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  2. maria May 7, 2016 / 3:28 pm

    Oh my gosh!!! You scared me a looooot with this one! (To think that it’s midnight here while I’m reading this). This somewhat reminds me of a scene from Gillian Flynn’s Dark Places. Geez, poor Karen. :\ Why do I have the feeling she killed grandpa and grandma, too? Wow! Great build-up of suspense, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 May 7, 2016 / 5:40 pm

      She didn’t kill Nana but was quick to help Grandpa who was in shock, to help him bury Nana in the barn. Grandpa did die of natural causes, I think he would have been pretty old about 90 or so. Alicia was doing what Grandpa wanted, burying him next to Nana. But Alcia has a sinister side and Karen asked too many questions and knew too much. Not to mention, I think there was bitterness from Alicia because despite he helping Grandpa, Karen was still a fav grandchild, as she had been with Nana too. Thanks for your thoughts.

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      • maria May 10, 2016 / 2:53 am

        Ooh… so that is why. This sounds like it could be a good movie! 😀 Great thinking, Mandi. 🙂

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      • mandibelle16 May 10, 2016 / 3:27 am

        Thank you Maria. Haha, it would be interesting. I think Alicia’s character could have many layers.


    • mandibelle16 May 7, 2016 / 10:31 pm

      Thanks, yeah I suppose. I think Grandpa really didn’t mean it. Bemuse got caught in a fit of range and then realized what he’d done. Alicia told him where to bury the body, it was her suggestion and help that got Grandpa through it. I don’t think she is a nice person, well Karen wouldn’t say she was nice, but she’s dead now.


  3. luckyjc007 May 8, 2016 / 1:13 am

    Wow! Great story, Mandi! Great twist. I was feeling sorry for them, but that feeling changed toward nus t

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    • luckyjc007 May 8, 2016 / 1:16 am

      ( my fingers were too fast in typing letters 😋 ) ….Just Karen ..at the end of the story.

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      • mandibelle16 May 8, 2016 / 1:22 am

        Lol. It’s fine. Autocorrect hates me 🙂 Happy you liked the piece. Alicia isn’t a good person. Poor Karen was just being used and it didn’t help she was the favourite of both Nana and Grandpa. Thanks Jessie.

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