Story Continuation Prompt: Flash Fiction – Escaping the Colony 


Thank you to Wandering Soul who hosts this challenge. This week we are to write a story up to 500 words about the future. The beginning sentence is:

Hundreds of drones zoomed ahead in the empty field, buzzing loudly like bees swarming over a honeycomb.

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Hundreds of drones zoomed ahead in the empty field, buzzing loudly like bees swarming over a honeycomb. The buzzing annoyed Jess and his ears hurt from hearing it.

Jess and Morgan had been hiding in the field, afraid the drones would harm them, especially, in daylight. 

The government deployed thousands of drones and used them to report on people’s activities. A person never knew if they were safe, or if their actions would be deemed breaking the law.

Those in leadership grossly abused their power. The average person tried their best to make it through the day without being told to report for questioning to the enforcement officers. 

Usually, the person who was being grilled, had no idea what they were being accused of or why. People did not have the right to an attorney. There was no actual judges or juries.

As Jess and Morgan watched the drones in the field, night fell and it was time to move. There was talk in the streets, of colonies with democratic governments, a fair judicial system, and even rights and jobs for their citizens. But the two men had to break through the colonies fence first.

Jess and Morgan were ran through the field as quick as they could. The drones saw them and began to buzz around them. “Th-there going to get us before we ev-even reach the fence,” Morgan sputtered in terror.

“No, we’ll be fine.” Jess said breathing heavily where they hid. “They haven’t reported us or shot at us. They’re not government.”

Both men ran and the drones suddenly started shooting, not at Jess and Morgan but at the fence. They cleared a pathway for them into the countryside. 

After a days walk, Jess and Morgan with the drones following, came to a colossal walled in colony. They didn’t know if this state was a democractic or another totalitarian state.

Large stone gates opened wide at a drones beep and Jess and Morgan walked inside the colony entrance. The drones beeped to the guards who nodded and smiled at Jess and Morgan as they entered the new colony.

Looking ahead of them Jess and Morgan were shocked to see a normal city with houses, a theatre, grocery stores, skyscrapers, and other buildings.Where they came from the colony was a war zone.

 A blue drone spoke to them, “We’re happy to have you in our city. Our colony wages war on your home colony and its dictatorial leaders. We try to free as many civilians as possible, from your government’s abuse.”

“Peace and democracy will reign when we win the war against your leaders and we’re close to defeating them. For now be at peace in our colony. You’ve rights and freedoms here.” 

What the drone said fulfilled both Jess and Morgan’s dreams.

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

11 thoughts on “Story Continuation Prompt: Flash Fiction – Escaping the Colony 

  1. Melinda Kucsera May 3, 2016 / 2:32 am

    wow what a story. I see this is a continuation. I need to find the first part! Excellent writing my friend! 🙂

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  2. Wandering Soul May 3, 2016 / 8:46 am

    War for peace? This so was so well written. Loved it!

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    • mandibelle16 May 3, 2016 / 4:33 pm

      I suppose, sometimes war is something we end up going through at different points in history. When I was writing this, I kind of pictured a world which had experienced much war and these colonies developed.

      Some like places now, had good leaders who knew how to govern. While others, had dictators who tore their colonies apart — like the colony Jess and Morgan came from. And certainly, I think they ended up with war again because people with power who abuse it, are never happy with what they have, the want to expand. So those of people who want to keep the peace, have to fight back.

      Thank you for reading, your comments, and hosting the prompt 🙂

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  3. Sonali Mukherjee May 3, 2016 / 9:32 am

    Wow, the evils of a totalitarian rule! I actually thought the drones were going to shoot at the boys, nice twist! Amazing story!

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    • mandibelle16 May 3, 2016 / 4:35 pm

      Thank you I’m happy you enjoyed it. We had to have drones that were helping them in the story prompt. I forgot to mention that. Thanks for your thoughts.

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  4. clcouch123 May 3, 2016 / 2:24 pm

    This is a second try at posting; so if you get two messages, I apologize. You create a world that no one (hopefully) would want to live in and then show freedom in, and as, the way out. This is greatly imaginative and insight work. As your reader, I am reflective–and relieved–in response. Thanks for this world-making crafting, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 May 3, 2016 / 2:42 pm

      Thank you for reading.happy to hear your thoughts 🙂

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