NaPoWriMo: Poem – Wrapped Refrain – “Death Stops” 


And now for our (optional) prompt! Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that begins with a line from a another poem (not necessarily the first one), but then goes elsewhere with it. This will work best if you just start with a line of poetry you remember, but without looking up the whole original poem. (Or, find a poem that you haven’t read before and then use a line that interests you). The idea is for the original to furnish a sort of backdrop for your work, but without influencing you so much that you feel stuck just rewriting the original!. For example, you could begin, “Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day,” or “I have measured out my life with coffee spoons,” or “I miss them, but it wasn’t a disaster,” or “they persevere in swimming where they like.” Really, any poem will do to provide your starter line – just so long as it gives you the scope to explore. Happy writing!

Please see NaPoWriMo for further information.

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A poem with another poems line: “Because I could not stop for death. He kindly stopped for me.”  – Emily Dickinson.

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Think it’s relevant, everything?

We do each day?  We are revelling,

Time drip-slipping away everyday.

Hovering over lunacy, play,

Forgetting we’re mortal, time wields our last battle.

Scars running deep, old injuries, our bones rattle.

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Knowing their isn’t a choice when death comes,

Though we run, he’ll kindly stop some —

Method of escape; We can’t stop —

For death, we wouldn’t know to drop,

So, he stops his chariot racing, catches mortal.

No breathing in the air, you’ve no need at the portal.

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To blessed world you find escape,

Death leading you in his slow gait, 

Time it has no meaning, kingdom —

Come has arrived and you are done.

Though years you might’ve waited for death to take you,

Think it’s relevant? Time? His hands; God holds you.

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

9 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo: Poem – Wrapped Refrain – “Death Stops” ”

  1. That is a great line you chose from Emily Dickinson. It’s a good reminder, I think, that at the end of the day, Death will always take us. And I like how you incorporated the tone of Emily’s line, sad but positive at the same time, into your own poem. Very well done Mandi 🙂

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  2. This is a telling line: “No breathing in the air, you’ve no need at the portal.” Death changes us, no doubt. But death is reality; and as with other things, death is in the hand of God.

    Good teaching, Mandi! Comforting.

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    1. Hi Christopher. Good Morning or whatever time of day it was you are. Glad you liked this. It was I difficult choosing alone from just one poet, but Dickinson is one of my favourites. I’m glad it’s good teaching. Thanks for your thoughts.

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  3. Your first line stopped me in my tracks. Indeed – is everything relevant? And then the following lines remind us about how little time we have and that we really don’t have any control over anything. Thank you for the reminder. 💕

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