NaPoWriMo: Poem – San San – “Measure of Time” 


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And last but not least, our (optional) prompt! Today’s prompt comes to us from TJ Kearney, who invites us to try a eight-line poem called a san san, which means “three three” in Chinese (It’s also a term of art in the game Go). The san san has some things in common with the tritina, including repetition and rhyme. In particular, the san san repeats, three times, each of three terms or images. The seven lines rhyme in the pattern a-b-c-a-b-d-c-d.

For more information please see NaPoWriMo.

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Years passing swiftly, games of play drifting.

The measuring of time, not considered passing.

We’re in the moment, giving our energy here.

Play drifting, time through the sands spent sifting.

Quietly measuring time, loved ones dying fast.

Memories assault us and we’re making new ones.

Missing those gone, but in the moment having no fear.

Passing each day, choosing wisely, we run.

—–

Sun always rises, something we depend on.

Bringer of hope, world constantly changing.

Each morning arise, handling each moment.

Each day, sun always rises, today gone.

Find bringers of hope, time we exchange.

Ultimate hope founded in our heavenly home.

Sleeping and morning arises, new day spent.

World finite, cared for above as we roam.

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©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

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24 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo: Poem – San San – “Measure of Time” ”

  1. two fantastic San Sans, the first feels more innocent like a young person’s view while the second feels like an older person’s view, or a person who’s staring at their own expiration date from illness. Someone who feels like time is running away from them; so they take a deeper look at time and all its implications.

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      1. Mandi, I truly hope I haven’t discouraged you from participating in the FFfAW challenge. I truly apologize if I offended you. It’s difficult to keep our stories within the word limits but it is also what makes flash fiction fun and challenging. Again, please accept my apology.

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      2. Hey PJ. I did write a story FFftaW this week. Maybe I forgot to link it. I’m not sure. You didn’t discourage me. Sometimes when I’m fatigued it is harder for me to follow guidelines and be detailed, especially if I’ve been juggling a lot of things on my plate as I have been lately.
        I did not mind at all that you told me my piece needed to be shortened. You were right and as with most of your critiques I know it was said with your best intentions at heart. The story last week turned out better because if your advice to trim it down.

        If I’m late participating for for this week’s Flash Fiction it’s only because I’ve been extra busy. I find as I expand my blogging network it’s a lot to comment on so many blogs, write for my blog, write pieces for submission and my novel, and do everything else.

        So don’t worry I’m still participating 🙂 Enjoy your weekend Pj 💞💕🌺

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      3. Thanks Mandi! I didn’t see your story on the story board and that is why I didn’t think you participated. I understand that you are getting very busy on the blogs because I see you commenting on a lot of posts. Just a tad bit of advice, try not to get burned out. I was trying to do too much and had to take a break. I’m happy to hear that you are still participating on my challenge!

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      4. Thank you so much, Mandi! I saw the link come through so it is linked now. I’m getting ready to go read it. I understand. I cannot read/comment on everything I want to either but I try to do as many as I can. I have learned that I have to be careful and not try to do too much or I get burn out.

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  2. I love the first line: “Years passing swiftly, games of play drifting.” Skilled use of rhyme, bonding two wise observations. The first part describe what feels as love and peace that last through time, that maybe are even built or tempered by pain. The second part speaks to the source of love and hope.

    A work of beauty, Mandi.

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