NaPoWriMo: Poem – Cinquin – “Unconditional Love”


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And now for today’s (optional) prompt! Today, I challenge you to write a poem in which you closely describe an object or place, and then end with a much more abstract line that doesn’t seemingly have anything to do with that object or place, but which, of course, really does. I think of the “surprise” ending to this James Wright Poem as a model for the effect I’m hoping you’ll achieve. An abstract, philosophical kind of statement closing out a poem that is otherwise intensely focused on physical, sensory details. Happy writing!

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——-

  
——–

Let me,

Tell you of her,

Fur so soft, silky, faun,

Course hair ontop, white underneath.

Ears back.

—–

Relaxed,

In this posture,

One paw on you always,

Rump on your lap, managed.

Love shown.

—-

On side, 

Lifting leg, paw,

Access given, sweet spot,

Rounded tummy, furry, blissful.

Eyes shut.

—–

Rub her,

Tummy, circle.

She’ll stay for hours while you,

Worship her tummy soft, peering up,

Brown eyes.

—–

Liner,

Of Northern Dogs,

Around her mischievous eyes,

For blocking out sunlight, arctic light.

Hackles.

—–

Raised,

When she thinks you’re,

Threatening her pack, protection —

Her job, in her domain, deep bark,

Incharge.

—–

Waiting

For her treat when, 

You’re finished with your lunch food,

She receives last bite and it seems more,

Pleased

—–

No charge, 

Unconditional,

Love a dog shows family,

Cuddling, thanking, and begging,

Large heart.

—–

Loving,

The way humans,

In her world should love,

Love each other, unconditionally,

So, hard! 

—–

©Mandibelle16. (2016) All Rights Reserved.

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37 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo: Poem – Cinquin – “Unconditional Love”

  1. clcouch123 April 11, 2016 / 7:27 pm

    Yes, dogs when treated right love without condition. More affectionate than cats in this way. More slobbery, too. Which is cool. Thanks for reminding us.

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    • mandibelle16 April 11, 2016 / 8:22 pm

      Lol. I knew you’d like this one Christopher. Nikki wasn’t too slobbery, thank goodness. Although, she would sit up beside you and quick as lightening flick her tongue out to lick you in the eye or where ever.

      Mostly, we dealt with her hair and her unending shedding schedule. Thanks for your thoughts Christopher. How are you feeling these days? Does it help that the weather is getting nicer?

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  2. Ameena k.g April 11, 2016 / 7:34 pm

    Aw, we can learn so much from animals- patience and love. I admire how described love and then explained that’s how it should be in humans.

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    • mandibelle16 April 11, 2016 / 8:19 pm

      I came across a inspirational post the other day. I wanted to show you it with picture but the comments won’t let me do that on my iPad. It inspires me in this poem:

      “What a Beautiful World it Would be, if People had Hearts Like Dogs.”

      Thanks for your thoughts Ameena. Always, glad to hear from you my friend.

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  3. Melinda Kucsera April 11, 2016 / 8:00 pm

    aw what a wonderful dog! Your poem is a perfect tribute 🙂 Now I want a furry canine friend…I’ll have to go play with my bro’s dog 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 April 11, 2016 / 8:14 pm

      Awe. Nikki passed back three-years ago around this time. She was my favourite dog and from time to time I still think about her. I would like another one but it’s just not going to work right now.lol. Thanks for reading Melinda.

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      • Melinda Kucsera April 11, 2016 / 8:56 pm

        You’re welcome 🙂 I know what you mean about it not working out. I’d love to have a dog too but my living arrangements don’t allow me to have one.

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  4. moonskittles April 11, 2016 / 8:16 pm

    Wonderfully penned as always Mandi! Loved the description a lot, and the picture too 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 April 11, 2016 / 8:25 pm

      Thanks Dajena. Am I spelling that right? Glad you enjoyed it. I’m not sure that the prompt worked this time. Azul told me it was difficult and she was right!

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      • moonskittles April 11, 2016 / 8:27 pm

        You are welcome yes, you did spell it right 🙂 Since we are friends, you can call me D. 😀 😀
        It was a bit of tricky one, but who does not like tricky prompts? I liked it 🙂

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      • moonskittles April 11, 2016 / 10:15 pm

        🙂 yay!

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  5. Priceless Joy April 11, 2016 / 11:30 pm

    Great poem, Mandi! Love it. Is that a photo of your “Nikki?” Oh, I just read that it is. She looks so beautiful here.

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    • mandibelle16 April 11, 2016 / 11:59 pm

      Yeah, she was in good health here and looking lovely. Glad you liked the poem. Thanks PJ 🙂

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  6. Judy Martin April 12, 2016 / 7:57 am

    This is so lovely, Mandi. I can totally relate, having the unconditional love of my little dog, Roxy. It is a dreadful shame that humans do not have this ability despite us supposedly being an intelligent species!
    You managed to stick to the brief as well, something I really struggled with for this prompt.

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    • mandibelle16 April 12, 2016 / 2:11 pm

      Thanks Judy. I’m glad as a pet owner you could relate. Animals are so dear to to us. Glad you thought the last line worked and fulfilled the prompt, I was to sure. Thanks for your comments as well.

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      • Judy Martin April 12, 2016 / 2:12 pm

        Oh it was my pleasure, as it was a wonderful poem 🙂

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  7. rosemawrites April 12, 2016 / 8:34 am

    you painted such a visually vivid and emotionally touching poem, Mandi! that last line is so true!

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    • mandibelle16 April 12, 2016 / 2:07 pm

      Thanks girl. Glad you liked Nikki’s portrait. My favourite dog, though long gone now. Yes, I definitely agree with you on the last line 🙂 Thanks For your thoughts.

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  8. Annie April 12, 2016 / 1:46 pm

    From the comments I learned Nikki passed. Sorry to hear that, it must have been hard. I could feel your love for her here. Lovely tribute, Mandi. 💕

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    • mandibelle16 April 12, 2016 / 1:51 pm

      Thank you. She’s been gone just about 3-years so it’s okay. She was just my girl lol so I miss that. Thanks for your thoughts Annie 🙂

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      • Annie April 12, 2016 / 1:53 pm

        You’re most welcome, my dear friend. 💕

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  9. Tamara Kulish April 14, 2016 / 3:04 am

    Cool! I like this concept!

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    • mandibelle16 April 14, 2016 / 3:13 am

      Thank you glad you enjoyed. Thank you for your thoughts.

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    • mandibelle16 April 15, 2016 / 5:20 pm

      I understand I skipped the A to Z poetry challenge to do NaPoWriMo. A shame they happened at the same time. Will definitely check- out your blog. Thank you for your comments 🙂

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