Flash fiction for Aspiring Writers: “Demonic Beauty”

Enclosed in the bar, eyes magnify; temptress in red, silk sliding on skin.

Sway in her hips, a tease of the senses. Men breathless consent, adoring sin.

Striding with ease, heels ruby with diamonds. Naked shoulders shimmer, anticipating.

Treading softly, fallen in red fire, elusive, and beguiling; illusion of flames sating.

Moving her hips, licking cherry red lips; coal glimmer in demonic eyes.

Sensations burning, engulfs her body; seething, writhing, building her disguise,

A vestige of power; she’s the tyger enticing, an allusion to Eden, of poisonus lies.

Decisive, sauntering closer, flicking hair, tar-black as the ash before Lent.

Peer into eyes, a glimmer of gold, metal men grieve for; silence, fire scent.

A vision, a curse, a whisper in vain — animating, the instrument on stage, 

Notes dance, music bleeding; breathing sweat, the melody of the enraged,

Fire rings, smoke engulfing; watch the woman despair, her voice entrances, beware–

Beauty enraged, a witch, incaged; performing she’s the beast, on stage no cares.



Thanks to Priceless Joy our wonderful host of FFfAW.


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47 thoughts on “Flash fiction for Aspiring Writers: “Demonic Beauty”

  1. rosemawrites March 1, 2016 / 5:19 am

    Ooooooh! That was a fast answer to this prompt and Mandi, you had me at that first sentence! This is just vivid, intense and hypnotizing (a bit!). Great job!

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 5:33 am

      Thanks Rosema. I’m not sure what she is exactly –she’s a terrible beauty, a bit demonic almost. I guess you’d have to be, to play such an instrument.

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  2. kingsoracle March 1, 2016 / 6:45 am

    Oops, fiery feisty full of flashing fire. gripping poetry dear, You have a way with words. 🙂

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  3. maria March 1, 2016 / 10:48 am

    Wow! Vivid imagery Mandi. And I especially love this line,
    A vestige of power; she’s the tyger enticing, an allusion to Eden, of poisonous lies. ❤

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 6:52 pm

      Thank you Maria glad you liked it. I like that line too. Thanks for commenting 🙂

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      • maria March 2, 2016 / 3:55 am

        You’re most welcome Mandi. I can imagine her walking from the door, with all eyes hungry for her, then getting on that stage. She hasn’t even played yet but your descriptions sounds like she has already performed beyond the stage. Powerful use of words! 😀

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      • mandibelle16 March 2, 2016 / 4:14 am

        Thank you Maria. I’m excited to hear you got that image, I spent a good deal of time crafting it and her. She’s definitely something wild, sexy, something dark too. But I think the music is her freedom.


      • maria March 3, 2016 / 2:04 am

        You’ve done perfectly well in fitting her image with your descriptions, Mandi. 🙂 I love the way you portray her, which goes perfectly well with the image too. 😀

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 6:51 pm

      Lol. Thank you Jacqueline. She most defiantly has the eye of the tiger 🙂


  4. Sonya March 1, 2016 / 1:01 pm

    I can see her sway her hips to the rhythm of the poem… Great stuff!

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  5. Priceless Joy March 1, 2016 / 1:23 pm

    Wow! Great poem, Mandi, with a lot of imagery. It seemed as though it was describing a woman dancing passionately. Very nice!!

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 6:49 pm

      Thank you PJ. She is some other worldly creature, a woman but not, dancing, seducing, and playing the guitar on stage.

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  6. clcouch123 March 1, 2016 / 5:55 pm

    Wow, succubus or incubus (I forget which is which). Great imagery bring red, black, and diamond colors together in sensorial, sensual–and, well, sonorous–ways. I particular admire “music bleeding” followed by “melody of the enraged.” You present a doom of men, I think. So well-done!

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 6:48 pm

      Thank you Christopher. Not sure what she is exactly, the doom of man is probably a good guess.

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  7. Joy Pixley March 1, 2016 / 7:08 pm

    Such a vivid picture you paint of such a passionate and spellbinding performance!

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    • mandibelle16 March 1, 2016 / 7:23 pm

      Thank you so much for your comments. Yes, she has a kind of power.


  8. Inside the Mind of Isadora March 1, 2016 / 7:24 pm

    Clever way to use the photo prompt. The fiery flame lit this little gal.
    Your words produced great imagery. Well done …
    Isadora 😎

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  9. nonnaci March 2, 2016 / 1:14 am

    Wow. I can see the words smoldering with that performance!

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  10. afairymind March 3, 2016 / 8:39 pm

    A well crafted piece with some beautiful imagery, Mandi. You’ve definitely created an intriguing character. Very nicely done. 🙂

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  11. rogershipp March 4, 2016 / 11:05 pm

    She has to be quite a woman… I could almost hear her sing… but I placed my fingers in each ear out of fear!

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