Flash Fiction for The Aspiring Writer: A Place to Sleep


“This is frustrating, Marcus.” Trisha complained.”Every morning at 6:00 am, the workmen start hammering and climbing up the scaffolding. Lulu and I just fall asleep, after her needing to eat all night, then the workmen arrive and make noise. I haven’t slept more than two-hours in a row for three-months.”

Marcus frowned, he wanted to help Trisha and Lulu. He could see how tired and run down Trisha was. Marcus went for a drive so he could think. He found himself driving through a neighbourhood with unique older houses.

To Marcus’s surprise, one of the houses had a ‘For Sale,’ sign. When Marcus walked into the house, he knew the house was perfect for his family. The house was updated five-years ago and the price was feasible. Trisha needed to see this house.

That evening Trisha stood in the great room of the house Marcus had found them. She turned around and sighed, “It’s quiet.” 

“So, we can buy the house?” Marcus asked.

Trisha laughed sleepily, “Yes.”

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Scafolding
Ellesepeth
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59 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for The Aspiring Writer: A Place to Sleep”

    1. I think, he knows that even though it will be hard making mortgage payments at first, it will be worth it for his wife/baby to sleep and as his family grows. Of course, they’re selling the condo. Thanks for reading.

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      1. Yeah, I was writing it and originally, he was driving on the highway and he gets an idea to help his wife and a semi truck kills him. I decided to go happy though and instead he drives into a neighbourhood and finds the perfect house. Thanks again for your comments.

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  1. I must make my husband read this…(*hinting to him to buy me a new house! LOL! 😀 😀 😀 ) Although I know his answer will always be… “no money!” LOL! 😀 Wonderful story, Mandi. I prefer this version to your original one (I read your comment above 🙂 ). We need something sweet and happy to carry on the mid week! 🙂

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  2. “Wonderful story, ” she said. “Glad it had a happy not hit by a semi ending,” she added. “I suspect the wife is so tired right now, she would move into any place her husband suggested was quiet. Maybe this has been his plan all along, ” she pondered.

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  3. I guess I must be getting old, because I used to think of myself as spontaneous, but buying a house at the spur of the moment without checking with your wife first? Too spontaneous for me! Still, she’s so sleep-deprived, she’ll go along with anything at this point, I’m sure. 😉

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    1. Haha. You are correct on second thought I’m like he should have showed her. I might look at revising the end. She won’t care at first but then she is going to be like ‘why did you pick a house with …..” Etc. Thanks for your comments.

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      1. Yeah, I haven’t a kid myself but many of my friends have little babies. My one friend in particular has had trouble with her little guy who is about 5 months old now and of actually getting decent sleep with him a couple months ago. She has had many problems so I thought of her. Hopefully the wife likes the house. I changed the end, deciding she does need to see the house before he buys it, even if she is incompletely lethargic. Thanks for your comments.

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  4. I get the romance, but he gets killed when there’s no second bathroom, the laundry room is downstairs, and why is the living room shaped like an “L” leading to the garage. Great thought, but him surviving it purely fiction.

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    1. Haha. Thankfully, that will come later when she isn’t a zombie being sucked dry by an infant and she is able to sleep. I thought later, yeah if I was in a relationship and someone bought a house without me I’d be upset, once I slept anyways. Not to mention, I thought of my Dad when we moved when I was 17, pretty much my parents are in the house they’re in because Dad didn’t want to look after that and it the house we picked was descent lol. Good call on that! You and a few others 🙂

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  5. A wonderful and caring story! She has a very understanding husband and I guess she can be grateful for all the noise she had to listen to because it led to her family getting a new house! A great example of how something negative lead to something wonderful. 🙂

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