Flash Fiction for The Purposeful Practitioner: The Price

When I removed the contents from my tote-bag, I was perturbed to see a tattered book inside.“I could see the corner of folded yellow parchment sticking out of the torn lining of the battered book.” 

“What’s this?” I whispered. Instantly, I heard chanting. In my mind I pictured two woman murmering magic with candles in a circle around them. It was as if the image had been placed in my mind.

Suddenly, the parchment opened in front of me. Oddly, the symbols on the parchment made sense to me. The parchment was a spell for immortality. I had no time to think, the words of the incantation flew from my lips:

Live forever, consequences well known,

Speak the words, let your time now cease flow,

Your string never snipped, fate overlooked you,

Alone, you will wander, the cost is many souls.

When I stopped chanting, the parchment and the book had disappeared. My boyfriend stomped in the front door. Before I gave him a hello kiss, he said: ” Something about you is different.” Then I kissed him hungrily and he disintegrated in my hands. I burst into tears and I learned the price of eternal life — my kiss was the kiss of death.




Thanks to Roger Shipp for hosting this Flash Fiction challenge.


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24 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for The Purposeful Practitioner: The Price

  1. Annie February 20, 2016 / 3:18 am

    Oh wow. “Disintegrated in my hands”. First I thought the narrator was talking figuratively, with the deep kiss and all, but then I learned about the kiss of death. Great story, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 3:28 am

      Thank you Annie. It’s both really. She kisses him and he disintegrates. Sad she is immortal but she can never be close to anyone. Thanks for reading!

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  2. luckyjc007 February 20, 2016 / 3:39 am

    Such a terrible consequence for a decision made in haste. It is unfortunate there was no time to think about it. It’s sad for her and him! Very creative story. I enjoyed it.

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 3:46 am

      Thank you Jessie. I don’t think she really had a choice. She saw the words and the words burst from her mouth. There was a magic going on behind the scenes that she had no control over.


  3. Fun Simplicity February 20, 2016 / 9:14 am

    Kiss of death… That’s not a good gift to have. A very creative story with magic chant! 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 9:59 pm

      Thanks so much glad you enjoyed it. Yeah the book screamed to me like it was an old tome of magic spells.

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  4. Sonya February 20, 2016 / 10:48 am

    Oh, you went down the evil spell route, as well. This is a powerful story – the book seems to have chosen her and cursed her to a life of solitude. I can see this as the beginning of a novel and I’d read on 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 9:55 pm

      Haha. Oh no something else I have to elaborate on. Yes I think it would be an interesting read. I’m glad you think so too! Have a good weekend.

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  5. The Voice February 20, 2016 / 1:29 pm

    Ooo… really cool story, Amanda! There’s always a price, isn’t there? And yet, too often we only think to find out what it is when it’s too late. Also enjoyed the reference to the Greek Fates in the incantation. Well done.

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 9:51 pm

      Thank you for your comments. Of course there is a price to pay. Even when she did not chose to be immortal, she still ends up paying. Glad you liked the references. I was thinking about Greek Myths when I wrote it – the fates and also Pandora.

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  6. Priceless Joy February 20, 2016 / 2:13 pm

    Oh, the terrible price of witchcraft and the desire for immortality. How sad that she lost her boyfriend but that is part of the “cost of many souls.” This is wonderful, Mandi!

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    • mandibelle16 February 20, 2016 / 9:49 pm

      Thank you PJ. It’s very tragic actually, because she did not even make the choice to be immortal, there was magic going on behind the scenes that ended her in this mess, never able to be close to a guy cause her kiss is the kiss of death for all time have a great weekend my friend 🙂

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  7. any1mark66 February 20, 2016 / 2:52 pm

    The wife no longer gets old books. That does settles it. Nice disturbing twist. Immortality must ha’ve a steep price

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  8. nonnaci February 20, 2016 / 11:49 pm

    Immortality is definitely a curse. Takes all the fun out of living.

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    • mandibelle16 February 21, 2016 / 8:29 pm

      Haha. Yeah, I guess so. I suppose it depends if she uses her abilities for bad or good. Thanks for reading.


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