Poem: Laturnes – “Shine in Light.”


The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of one, two, three, four, one.

Please see Shadow Poetry for more information.

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——

You

May find

Comfort in

Waiting for the

Time

—–

You 

Might find

Things will be

Alright and be

Fine

—–

What

Will you

Do when you

You are unstable

Fall

——

Will

You try 

To remain

As a Yogi so

Calm

——

Or 

Explode

In movement —

Lightening quick

Energy.

——

They’re

Choices

To act on

Decide your way

Fast 

——

They’re

Choices

To think about

Life makes time so

Slow.

——

In 

The end

There is you

Sliding falling

Alone

——

And

You may

Struggle with

Finding inside

Hope

——

In

The dark

It’s hard to

Find your way out

Look.

——

Shine

Light on

The problem

Dawn glows glimmer,

Hope.

——-

How

Is it

Easier 

To leave unsaid

Words.

——-

Words

Whispered

Hide secrets

No one will know

Ever.

—–

Light

Reveals

Darkness hides

The horrible truth,

Grow.

—–

Be

Not in

The blackest 

Places you find

Thrive.

—–

Be

In the

Sparkle seen

Glittering sky

Alive

—–

Crash

Through the

Walls that hold

You in place move,

Close.

—–

Fight

There is 

No hiding 

Thrive or snuff out

Light

——

©Mandibelle16.All Rights Reserved.

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28 thoughts on “Poem: Laturnes – “Shine in Light.”

  1. hooklineandinkwell January 23, 2016 / 11:11 pm

    I like your modern approach to the Lanturne: four lines instead of five and a staggered syllabic count.

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    • mandibelle16 January 23, 2016 / 11:44 pm

      Funny thing. I missed that fifth line with four syllables. I added in a line and changed the poem around a bit. Thanks for telling me nicely lol. As for the staggered syllables not on purpose either. I guess my counting a off to but it sounds good atleast. Thanks for reading.

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      • hooklineandinkwell January 23, 2016 / 11:49 pm

        It is a great piece and I thought you were doing it all on purpose. It’s funny about syllable counts, they are so easy to miss when you are in the zone with an idea. It’s always a pleasure to ready your work 🙂

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      • mandibelle16 January 23, 2016 / 11:50 pm

        Haha. I guess I was then. Thank you I like your poetry as well.

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      • hooklineandinkwell January 23, 2016 / 11:52 pm

        Hehe, of course you were. I perform on stage a lot and I never tell when I made a mistake because most people think it’s part of the show. So, the first rule is to go with it 🙂 Thanks, Mandi…I am happy you like my work 🙂

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  2. bikurgurl January 24, 2016 / 12:39 am

    Fantastic! Thank you so much for sharing — I find that the uber short thoughts are difficult to capture, but I love the idea of it. Thank you for sharing!!

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      • bikurgurl January 24, 2016 / 5:08 pm

        I posted an Ode to Ikea in my latest post (1/23/16)more as a comedic lark…I’ll have to work up to the Quatrains — yours are fantastic! Thank you for sharing!

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  3. iamabloggertoo January 24, 2016 / 12:08 pm

    Lanturne. This word is new to me. You have written a nice poem here. I like the picture too. 🙂

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  4. Priceless Joy January 24, 2016 / 2:25 pm

    This is a beautiful poem Mandi, but I have to admit it was difficult for me to read.

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    • mandibelle16 January 24, 2016 / 8:17 pm

      I’m sorry PJ because of it’s length or the poem didn’t have flow? Thank you for reading despite.

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      • mandibelle16 January 24, 2016 / 8:24 pm

        Oh I see. Yeah. It is difficult writing such short poetry. I will give it some more tries as this was my first. Thanks PJ for your honesty.

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      • mandibelle16 January 24, 2016 / 8:43 pm

        Oh no you couldn’t offend me. I know you are only giving constructive feedback. 🙂

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  5. clcouch123 January 24, 2016 / 10:18 pm

    “How/Is it/Easier/To leave unsaid/Words.” The is one part of several compelling parts. The whole poem challenge us in ways that are direct yet also considerate. And creative! Thanks!

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