Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers: On The Run

I’m trying to blend into the people who are out on Whyte Avenue at night. I’m starving but afraid to stop. I step into a noisy pool hall blending in with a blonde guy and his buddy. We team up and win some money from teams of other Pool players.

I’m near the airport and I sigh at the far walk ahead until I find a bicycle unlocked. I ride hard and buy an early plane ticket to Vancouver. I devour breakfast first.

As I leave the Vancouver airport on the train, I see him. How did Kieran find me? I sob earnestly, as I reach my Motel room.

Kieran catches me leaving after sleeping. He holds me as I shiver at the chemistry between us. I can’t risk being his girl.

” Why are you running Audrey? Don’t you know I’ll always find you? You’re my person, “he murmurs.

“I’m afraid” I whisper ” I’m scared of having a happy life. I’m scared I’ll lose it.”

Kieran grasps my hands, ” Audrey, I  love you and will never leave you. You don’t have to run anymore.” Kieran has said the right thing. I have security.

Word Count: 180 words


Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting. Great job PJ!


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24 thoughts on “Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers: On The Run

  1. Sonya December 15, 2015 / 11:58 pm

    I love the tension – I got the sense from the beginning she needs to run because she was in danger. Or, as it turns out, she only imagined she was… Great ending!

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    • mandibelle16 December 16, 2015 / 12:14 am

      Yeah, she has troubles believing she is safe and can depend on people. I there’s a bad childhood story there. Thanks for visiting.

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  2. Joy Pixley December 16, 2015 / 12:04 am

    Something tells me that even if they do try settling down, Audrey’s going to have a hard time handling it. You convey her nervous fear too well!

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    • mandibelle16 December 16, 2015 / 12:13 am

      Yeah, she is a runner. Maybe for once she’ll stay. Thanks for reading and commenting.


  3. Priceless Joy December 16, 2015 / 12:39 am

    How sweet – thank you Mandi! Audrey was running from her fear of happiness. Thank goodness Keiren was able to make her feel secure! Great story Mandi!


    • mandibelle16 December 16, 2015 / 1:12 am

      Thanks PJ for visiting. I thought I nice love story was good for this week.


      • Priceless Joy December 16, 2015 / 1:17 am

        It was a sweet love story! I use to tell my son that he had a fear of success. I also told him that I believed in him and he started doing awesome! LOL! He doesn’t have that fear anymore! He is a very successful father, husband, and provider. Your story of “fear of happiness” reminded me of him.

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  4. summerstommy2 December 16, 2015 / 1:06 am

    I liked the episodic nature of your post Mandi…I thought it worked very well….

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  5. Alixa December 16, 2015 / 8:25 pm

    Great story! I love how it reflects reality, how often we let our fears stop us from reaching. Audrey is lucky to have found someone who wouldn’t give up on her 🙂

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  6. Laura Thiessen December 17, 2015 / 3:23 am

    Sometimes we all run from something that may be good for us. Well done.

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    • mandibelle16 December 17, 2015 / 3:30 am

      Thank you for reading and commenting. I think sometimes we don’t even see something is good for us, we just run.

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  7. luckyjc007 December 17, 2015 / 4:22 am

    Security is such an important factor in one’s life. I think Audrey found that security when Kieran kept finding her and told her he would keep finding her because he loved her and was never going to leave her. I think she needed to hear that even though she may have already known it. This is a wonderful story showing insecurity, and then believing in security. 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 December 17, 2015 / 4:07 pm

      Thanks Lucky. You are very right aboutAudrey. Sometimes past experiences make it hard to trust again.


  8. Ameena k.g December 18, 2015 / 7:00 am

    She went through so much to escape happiness, but it still caught up with her in the end. I think finally , the character would have her happy ever after. ☺

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    • mandibelle16 December 18, 2015 / 3:50 pm

      Thanks for visiting.yes she was happy when she stopped running.


  9. afairymind December 21, 2015 / 11:08 pm

    I hope she does manage to move past her fears and accept his love. Great build up of tension – I really thought she was fleeing from a violent relationship and was very pleased to discover that she wasn’t. 🙂

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    • mandibelle16 December 21, 2015 / 11:54 pm

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked how things ended up. Have a Merry Christmas!

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