Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers – The Jumper


Jesse felt a disturbance in the air — as if something terrible was going to occur. He felt it long before he saw the wet thunderous impact of a man’s body smash resoundingly into his metro train window.

An old man stopped for a moment at the edge of the platform to one of the metro trains. It didn’t matter which train. Then taking a deep breath while sweating prefusly, he jumped into the path of an oncoming train. 

He knew it could not stop in time. He jumped and as the lights from the train blinded him and his body broke, he saw light. A light beyond the brightness of lights in his former world. A glow of bedazzling rays.

Word Count: 120

 

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23 thoughts on “Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers – The Jumper”

  1. I don’t live far from the station in this photo. Your story seems to be happening more and more often – all around our area – these days. I often wonder exactly what you’ve written – what must those last moments have been like for the conductor and the jumper…very well done.
    Ellespeth.

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  2. Good use of the two different perspectives to tell the story. Sad that the old man felt that he had to throw himself in from of a train. I hope the bright light heralds a happier existence wherever he’s heading next. Well done.

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